This is perfect as is. Her eyes are far to the side, catching herself or someone else in the mirror? Her butt/hip area--I know several real people with that kind of body outline, especially when in that position. And what her pussy looks like? Well, everyone can imagine it is whatever is perfect to them. Well done.
I'm so glad that your "Her First Encounter" is being produced as a novel! I knew that story had a lot of potential. I'm a little disappointed, though, because I was not able to read the last chapter before it was taken down. Nonetheless, congratulations on this milestone!