Jacaranda Blue

Poem Info
124 words
4.38
2.3k
0
Share this Poem

Font Size

Default Font Size

Font Spacing

Default Font Spacing

Font Face

Default Font Face

Reading Theme

Default Theme (White)
You need to Log In or Sign Up to have your customization saved in your Literotica profile.
PUBLIC BETA

Note: You can change font size, font face, and turn on dark mode by clicking the "A" icon tab in the Story Info Box.

You can temporarily switch back to a Classic Literotica® experience during our ongoing public Beta testing. Please consider leaving feedback on issues you experience or suggest improvements.

Click here

A girl met a guy on sandy Matala.
Summer days in sixty-nine,
would-be hippies dancing in limestone,
kids playing at a lifetime.
She wore half a suit of jacaranda blue.
And he posed, brave American,
in cowboy hat, patriotic flip flops,
and a come-on-try-me grin.
He spun aw-shucks stories of his father's dairy,
while she played Briseis to his Achilles.
They shared salt-water baths and licorice kisses
until tourist days faded into autumn's clouds.
On that last day, she clutched at his shirt,
tears on her lashes,
as navy guards watched them linger
at the gate, locked in a punishing last kiss.
She later married a cute Norwegian,
but thirty-odd years later,
she still sends a card at Christmas,
and he remembers jacaranda blue.

Please rate this poem
The author would appreciate your feedback.
  • COMMENTS
Anonymous
Our Comments Policy is available in the Lit FAQ
Post as:
Anonymous
7 Comments
greenmountaineergreenmountaineerabout 13 years ago

Images are provocative and enticing, but the frequent punctuation got in the way for me. A good poem, but I'd extend the syntax in it more from one line to another.

UnderYourSpellUnderYourSpellabout 13 years ago
~

A bit clichéd that it starts in summer and ends in autumn but I enjoyed it nonetheless

AngelineAngelineabout 13 years ago
I agree with Tess

well written (and worth a 5 imo, which I voted it), but it could be more exciting, maybe some twist in those last few lines that might shock or make the reader smile or get more engaged in the poem.

GuiltyPleasureGuiltyPleasureabout 13 years ago
Sweetly....

...innocent and visually vibrant narrative in danger of the dreaded prose. I liked certain lines.." salt-water baths and licorice kisses" for example.

Tess

twelveoonetwelveooneabout 13 years ago
*

as other comments 5

Show More
Share this Poem

poem TAGS