All Comments on 'A Little Itch'

Instead of being a wimp and crawling into a bottle he should have gotten some real revenge with his buddy Larry, just planting a 'seed' was pretty limp-wristed and probably didn't make one iota of difference.

It isn't much of an ending either, two paragraphs is a pretty sorry excuse for an epilogue

Marvelous story of subtle revenge.

Relationships, especially marriage, are based on trust. What a mighty oak grew from that tiny seed of doubt. Tell a person to NOT think about an elephant. They can't. The image of an elephant pops unbidden into their head. Until spoken, it is easy to ignore you hooked up with a cheater. Once discussed, that image is always in the mind.

Every unanswered home phone, every cell call gone to voice mail, every lunch with a "girlfriend."

Beautifully done, sir.Thank you.

Psychological warfare is extremely powerful. A small push over a long time can accomplish more than a mighty push over a short time

He lost his daughter? How the hell is that revenge?

Bullshit revenge on bitch. Bulldhit revenge on mayor for stealing his wife.

I can see where you were trying to go with this but you came up a bit thin.

I can't see why it would turn into a wife beater. We're not told, but apparently Larry thinks he wimped out as did many commenters. I tend to side with them because passive-aggressiveness is the trademark of a wimp and coward.

A very unsatisfying story.

Question:- What is with these fucked up Judge's? They award the cheating Slut everything! You know that Judges become lying cheating politicians that pass laws allowing Ashley Madison. Com to operate in the country! So in the beginning WHO FUCKED WHO AT THE COPA COCO CABANA (cant spell ) So Saying! What a Fucked Up World We Exist In! Were Sluts control Judges (fuck buddies maybe)

Story is fantastic! So That is My Comment 5 ★ WOOF!

There are Honest Judges But Not Many?. See Ya!

Useless.... absolutely useless.

To be a divorce court judgr, you simply have to be the dumbest person in the area. Then you have to have a twisted sense of ethics and morality. My ex-wife cheated on me with half of the male population while I was away serving in the military. The judge gave her full custody of our son, even though she was shacked up with a felony drug user. My son hates ME to this day because, in his mind, I had to be worse than his mom or else the judge would have awarded him to me. i hope the judge dies the most agonyzingly painful death.

I don’t think I’ve read anything by this author before, but I’m gonna watch for his name. So I can avoid his stories. For him to blame his “wimpishness” on his military experience is just bullshit. Serving in combat doesn’t create wimps. If anything it hardens a person to the point that violence is pretty much always an option. Can’t fault Larry for turning his back on the guy. The guy was a pathetic loser and Larry did himself a favor by distancing himself. Jeez, I wish I could “un-read” this story. 1*.

Very tame story, his "revenge" was absolutely useless. And giving up on his daughter like that? She was probably better off with her mother in that case. I don't question that a former soldier can get sick of any more violence, but to this point? No way.

But a word to "penneydog55" (and others who comment on stories) who posted before me, very few of the stories on this site are the literal truth! That judge is NOT A REAL PERSON. This case has never been through A REAL US court, this is not a factual account of a real divorce. You DON'T live in the country described here, that country does not exist. The injustice of the treatment John received from the (fictitious) court has obviously been exaggerated to make his plight seem even worse.

One more point, at the very beginning we are told that the court has awarded 50% of everything of John's to go to his wife, both property and income. Pretty standard in cases like this I believe where there is a small child involved. BUT, at the bottom of page one John is wondering why his wife didn't ask for alimony? Well, she must have, or she wouldn't have been awarded alimony, because alimony is what she got, that's what you usually call it when one spouse has to give up their income to help support the other. Fair or unfair.

Everything he told the mayor , were lies . No need for paternity test , unless he just wanted to take a shot in the dark, that his daughter was not his.

One of those stories that blends in reality. The husband in this situation was not wimp. He did the right thing in the way he handled his wife's infidelity. The worst part is the time invested in the relationship.

8 years wasted with a woman who decided to trade up. In the end, he gets fucked over by the legal system. With the way the legal system is now, the cards are stacked against men.

With the divorce rate at 50%, marriage is like flipping a coin. I can't see any young fellow getting married today without seriously considering a pre-nup agreement.

How does the IRS seizure of his dealership have to do with anything? How/why did it happen?

Did Amanda have an affair(s) afterward?

Just too many holes left in this story.

2-stars

When your that big of a wimp, your wife is morally obligated to cheat on you. If you don't have any life in you and just do what society tells you all the time, don't act surprised when you die with a broken back, no one's respect, and nothing to show for yourself. Your government thanks you for your tax dollars and not propagating your dead-end genes.

Not really a wimp. War changes you, sickens your soul and even the thought of more violence can literally make you vomit.

To cheat on a partner is bad enough but to cheat on your husband who is a wounded vet is just about as low as you can crawl.

Good story - though a BTB it is not - exactly.

Always amazed at the negative anon comments. My hope is that they quit griping and write really "good" stories.

This person came out looking like´t more than a wimp. if you can call that a person. Why didn´t he file for divorce and file a lawsuit against her boss for alienation of affection? Maybe because it wouldn´t fit the story? Anyway, to me. She came out smelling like roses, She gave up a lazy hubby for someone that at least held a promise of a better future for her and her daughter. So she divorces her ex boss. Doesn´t mean she can´t find someone still better than her first. I´ve known a lot of people that prefer to live on the edge of poverty than take orders from someone else. And this character just reminds me of one of them. Not a very good story that only served to put veterans in a bad light.

When first we practice to become dipshits

He really needed it spoon-fed to him.

Here is an alternate ending that your story inspired: He carries two of the cheek swab DNA tests into Herb's office. One was already used to swab Larry's cheek. He tells the story, takes out the unused swab, and swabs his own cheek. Then below the table he swaps specimens and gives Herb Larry's swab saying, "Here. You do the test if you don't believe me. Compare my DNA to my daughter's and see if I'm her father..." That would speed things up a bit.

Good story.

Not only was I not the father but nor was Herb.

When my lawyer heard that he went back to court to get the child support dropped. Our state is one of the few that says it a husband is not the father he does not have to pay child support.

My lawyer also applied to force Amanda to reveal who the father is or who it might be. The judge was initially wary of allowing this until it was pointed out to him that I deserved reimbursement of all the child support I had originally provided and the only way to get that was from the baby daddy. The judge then withdrew to his chambers to consider his verdict. When he came out he recused himself from the case, which instantly set warning bells off in my solicitors head. My case was rescheduled for 2 weeks.

Two weeks later the new judge forced Amanda up on the stand to give the names of everyone she had sex with during the time of her daughters conception. You guessed it the original judge was one of the men involved. The new judge ordered DNA samples from all the men involved and again you guessed it the original judge was shown to be the father.

As a result I got back ALL of the child support I had been forced to pay as reimbursed for all cost involved from the daughters birth. The judge was forced to resign and his wife divorced him and took him to the cleaners. He however was forced to pay a large amount of child support to Amanda which he prepaid as a lump sum of several hundreds of thousands of dollars. He later declared bankruptcy and now lives in a trailer giving legal advice to transients. When he is sober that is.

My divorce settlement was revisited and I no longer had to give her half my pension. In fact she was forced to repay me any and all monies that I had paid to her after the divorce. She was also forced to pay me more for the house as the settlement had been revised to 75/25% in my favour.

The reason old Herb was charged with assault was all the pressure had built up due to the money she and by extension he was on the hook for in regards to our divorce.

With the IRS and everything he was broke and many thousands of dollars in debt. He also ended up living in a trailer 3 down from the ex-judge.

Well thought out, well executed, simple plan. Loved it!

How does being disabled, make him lazy? You do realize he took shrapnel while defending our country? I realize, there is a a select group of “patriots “ who believe that John McCain was a loser, because he refused to take special treatment from the NVA, just because his dad was an admiral. These people claim to support law enforcement, but the majority have criminal records. They claim to support our democracy, but refuse to acknowledge the rights of others. I am hoping you just forgot the facts of the story. Degrading the service men and women, who offer up their lives in service to our country, is a vile, disgusting act. Please revise your comment.

HUGE factual error: Edit the story to eliminate his ex-wife getting ANY of his disability pension. SCOTUS ruled in Howell v. Howell.

Ok but could have been better if had invested more time in the story. The daughter was a complete side issue and emotionally dispensed with without a thought.

Not.much in the way of revenge. Maybe the little seed bore fruit in the end, but we weren't told. Anonymous wrote the better story here.

Ugh. The MC was unsympathetic and unlikable. Some itch.

What a useless wimp, what a horrible story. I so disliked the MC. Not a violent bone in his body, bullshit!!!!

Read twice now, previously gave it 3/5, now I give it 1/5.

If you never have any respect for yourself, no one else will respect you either.

sow the seeds of doubt, and the righteous will prevail

What happened to Darla? Is she still with the ex Amanda? I assume he is still paying child support. Does he get to see her, at all?

Parts of this were good, but it just didn't gel.. More importantly, what happened to his child?

Too many questions. What about Darla? What happened to his ex later? Did she have any regrets? too much meat left out of the story.

Little dick GI was a wimp and a sissy.

And what happened to his daughter? Too little!

There were so many unfinished parts to this story it dropped a few stars.

This is so unfinished I’m wondering if JPB is using a nom de’ plume.

What about his daughter? Too much left out.

A weak pathetic story with a weak pathetic husband. Rates zero stars.

What about his daughter?

You skimmed to the finishing part with nothing after his talking to Herbert, except that he lost re-election & why. Should've been more in depth than that. 1 1/2 pages getting somewhere, then it more or less drops. And his daughter - did he have the DNA test? Who's the father? Could've been a nice story, but came apart. Also didn't like that the guy who fought in wars seemed weak vs. a Ford dealership owner. Lastly, how did the IRS become involved? Too much left out. 1 star -- Bob

SERVING 2 TOURS YET HE IS STILL A FUCKING WEAK WIMP STUPID CUNT!!

HE SHOULD HAVE MANNED UP

Larry never spoke to him again?? Some buddy he was....NOT.

Good beginning, but seems like you got bored halfway through

This submission was poorly conceived and sloppily written. Simply put, if you the author wished to tell a story of this complexity, he should have been willing to put more effort into it. He presents too little detail of the the divorce complainnt and court proceedings to offer any real understanding of the MC's legal situation. He provides no insight into how the MC's 100% VA disability rating impacted his treatment in the divorce, especially with regard to child custody issues and finances. Finally, he provides no information about the child's status post divorce. At best, about 50% of the needed effort was put into this weak submission.

Guy is/was an utter wimp

I seem to be missing the middle chapters of this story. I have the start and the end, nothing in between.

Junk. For one thing, just by going after Herbert about stealing married woman would have ruined his chances for any elections.

Instead of actually making any plot that would be some work the author goes over to the ending with wishy-washy banalities including typical LW rebound.

If you do not have a plot, if you cannot come up with a meaningful storyline then do not write because the only thing it would result is a trivial story this guy has here.

lol come on man even his revenge was wimpy

That was one of the wimpiest revenge stories I have seen!! It’s like a boy saying …ok I shouted at my sisters doll!! Take taht sis for all the trouble u gave me!!!

Only half a story all build up no conclusion.

He got his revenge without going to jail or actually hurting anyone... He was right about his wife, Apparently, her new husband heeded the warning and secretly kept tabs on his new wife and apparently caught her cheating on him. Only, He resorted to violence and being a politician, it made headlines. What no politician ever wants is a scandal.

Lacks the emotional depth needed for this to be really successful. The man was tortured and no one cares? Not even a city full if red hats with a Trump designee for a candidate is going to win an election after seducing a torture survivors wife and publicly humiliating him. Even if the husband didn't do anything, others would be far too disgusted.

There is so much missing and wrong here, I am surprised it has a 4

Read again, he was a cuck and wimp. Allowed things to happen to him rather than initiate things

Poor story, but this author is noted for weak characters

Rescored story to 1/5 from 3/5

Huh??

Femdom agitprop, but no fun.

Ending helped, but the early part of the story was way too sad.

No mater how you tried to negate your MC's losing his balls over in the sand box,he did. So much so, he even lost his best friends respect which in the end did not seem to be of value to your MC..You presented him in such a way that he is not easy to like..his answer was the bottle..in real life it would not surprise me that any wife would leave a husband once she lost respect....3 stars for the story...JZK

It doesn't tie up any loose ends. I guess he lied about doubting his daughter was really his, but that isn't clear. The character development of an ex-soldier who could never again face violence was well done, but there were other things he could have done. I understand why Larry lost respect for him, but did he have to desert him completely? What kind of good friend does that? I like the little itch aspect. Unique and creative, just not enough to save the story. Good try though.

I guess it’s just a coincidence, but every Amanda I have known, were all Narcissist , backstabbing, gold digging, cheating sluts! But I loved the story, 5 stars.

Not very good. The MC doesn't seem to have an awful lot about him and looks like he's happy just to let things happen to him and react to them in a half hearted way. Small wonder his admittedly repugnant wife bailed out on him.

As AngelRider pointed out there is no way that this politician hooks up with a married woman and gets elected, especially when the woman's husband is a military veteran. In the unlikely event of said politician being able to keep his squeeze's identity under wraps there is a glorious opportunity for the MC to out the pair of them in the most public way possible but he'd rather just feel sorry for himself and do nothing. Then he approaches the slimeball with some unfounded tittle tattle which can easily be shot down by the tramp and he calls that revenge. I sure wouldn't want him beside me in the trenches.

Well, the MC was right. He was nothing but a sissy wimp cuck. He didn't bring any pain into anybody's life and his cheating skank slut wife got off Scott free. What a pathetic loser.

Too little too late. Hate when husband characters don’t fight for theirs kids and rights. You saved it at the end but made the MC a wimp most of this story.

Jeez I hate these stories about a pussy whipped slow witted MC!!! Too many of today’s writers are continuing to use this idea!! This guy is so whipped that he even drives his long time best friend away!!! What a crock of BS!!!

So he loved her…. So what?? Pick your balls up, put them back on quit your pissing and moaning!!!Had an absolutely excellent opportunity to cause lover boy real grief even before the divorce but didn’t take it!!

Talk about stupid!!!

One hundred percent disabled means the VA won't be giving her anything and the judge can't touch it. Story was a 4 to me because I liked the "4 years later" part.