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"God, has Heather seen this?"
"I gave her a copy of it a few years back, it was close to the anniversary of his death and I thought it would help her get through it a little better if she had something happy to remember him by."
I reached up and hugged his neck, crying softly into his neck as he held me tenderly.
I heard him softly whisper before I fell back asleep in his arms, "A promise is a promise."
- COMMENTS
Dalushalmost 10 years agoPLEASE tell me there's gonna be more on this after such a promising start?!
Anonymousalmost 15 years agoThe story is a good start, but clearly, there are so many unresolved issues that to call it complete is hardly an accurate statement.
-- KK in Texas
srgeekalmost 15 years agoFirst, I rated it a 4 because I don't know if you are quitting here or if you plan to finish the story.
<BR>- - Second it doesn't appear to be written for a general audience (GA) unless a GA is defined as 80% female.
<BR>- - Third, the sleepy time act doesn't play well given a near drowning experience.
<BR>- - Fourth, she doesn't insist on knowing the little girl's outcome, especially given that you wrote her as thinking that she did/may have failed to save her.
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<I>-- srgeek --</I>
PennLadyalmost 15 years agoThis is a great start. The characters are nicely drawn, and I can't wait to see more.
