Christmas Vacation Ch. 01

i'm going on to read chapter 2. good tease, good twist in the opening

I like your approach - the twins are already having a relationship at a college across the country but now have to cool it while at home and with the folks in Hawaii. It's gonna be hard to do and I'm looking forward to reading more.

I assume Dari is on birth control because she seems to like fucking her brother quit a bit - a girl after my own heart! I thought it was a nice touch that only her brother could wound her so deeply using a nickname but that she couldn't stay mad at him for long. When you truly love someone it works that way, I think. Insightful of you.

Thank you, and I wouldn't pay too much attention to negative comments made here. A few readers who have never attempted writing consider themselves literary critics. When I criticize it is meant to be helpful, not hurtful, and I make that clear.

First: @Jagnag --- Thank you for leaving a review, but I wish you had read the story more thoroughly. From your comment, it seems as though you did gloss over vital information mentioned before and after the twins had sex. As for the beginning, this is how I wanted to start the story because it sets up the rest of the chapter, future chapters, and reveals the twins' already established sexual relationship. I'm not expecting everyone to love every chapter I post as long as they give an honest effort in reading and understanding what they read. You should go back and try rereading it.

Second: @Anony --- Thank you for sticking up for me, but name calling is unnecessary. Jagnag is entitled to their opinion no matter how wrong we think they are. This chapter is only just over a page because it's meant to give a taste of the twins' relationship and what they have to go through to keep it a secret. Future chapters will be longer. And you're right; it takes ten regular Word pages to make one page for Literotica. ;)

Third: @prop69 --- Thank you! I'm glad I was able to throw a twist you were not expecting. Upcoming chapters will answer all your questions. Thank you again!

Loved the beginning before she matured. Did she have her first sex with her ex-boyfriend or her brother? Was any sex to set up her love with brother.

Nice love making descriptions.

Can't wait for the next chapter in Hawaii

I read the story after reading your comment, and you're so freaking wrong! You low scored a story you clearly didn't read. It was a ruse. They have a whole conversation before they have sex. Her brother references their sexual relationship about her being better at pretending they're just brother/sister. It even mentions they had sex earlier that morning. And there's another conversation about their relationship after they had sex. You need to either get glasses or learn how to read. It may not have been written the way you would've done it, but you haven't written anything on here, have you? Next time, don't score a story you skimmed over and then decide to leave a dumbass comment.

To the author: Yes, you could've defined their relationship a little better, but nothing that can't be fixed in the next chapter. And it could've been longer, but I hear it takes ten pages on Word to create one page for Literotica, so you wrote a lot to get to page two. I look forward to reading about their vacation in upcoming chapters.

You keep writing, and I'll keep reading without skimming and vote appropriately, not like Jagoff, I'm sorry... Jagnag did!