by Nicequip
Gotta say I loved this one.
I laughed out loud at "Adriennne"
Well done!
Frank
Agree that a Part 3 is needed. The end of 2 isn’t necessarily a cliffhanger but you set it up as a waypoint in what could be a more complete story. A vignette about each character in their various futures…maybe how their experience ended up with positive outcomes. I see all the characters as an extended family ensemble…related by blood or marriage. The jerk football guys, etc. can be lackey employees, humiliated on various estates…etc., etc. Lots of fun to be had. I admittedly grew tired of the cute little names for body parts, etc. I understand that various characters using those words is important to showing the character’s development…how controlled they are. But it got tedious and distasteful. But the story premise and narrative are very good. Potent themes. Well done.
I hope there's a new installment coming or maybe even a spinoff of the Novelist saga
I love this story it’s brilliantly stupid! I am hopeful the author can return to us one day and continue this story. Good luck with the new business @Nicequip hope you’re well and can pick it up again!
Over the top, but fun anyway! Part 3 please.
Also, it would be hotter if Danny didn’t share his women; I didn’t like how Mandy let her dad fuck her, and Beth should have been in Danny’s exclusive harem too.
Thanks for sharing your work!
I love this story! Any word on when the eager anticipated part 3 will be available?
I really loved this story, humour and sex, a great combination. Great job Nicequip!
Of course I gave you 5s, however I would love to see this story go on. Perhaps Danny can take almost everything from the Cooper's, companies and homes. Not quite broke the whole Cooper gang goes to LasVegas to try to get another fortune. Mrs. C, Mandy, Beth and of course the gay clean up whore Janice have to work as real whore to support Daddy's gambling. I love to see Libby end up taking dog cocks in sex shows. UNLV Fraternities should pay nicely for the shows they could put on. Consider these ideas if you wish. Feel free to write me if you wish.
Thank you for sharing you time and talent with us, it is appreciated.
amyMac, a writer elsewhere
A fun story, but seems will never be ended. Anyone interested in picking it up?
Excellent storylines and plot twists. Always enjoy the variety of where the story goes and the different characters and how they engage with her lead male role model, Danny. I could do without the puffed parts but quickly scrolled through that. Really glad you got the mom Involved she has needs to. Really great job here. Five stars for me. Now, can you get started on writing part three or Danny and his mom take on the world.
5 stars for both parts, but where's part 3???
At the beginning of part 2, you wrote that you were working on part 3 already, but that was 05/12/2018, 4 and a half years ago! :-(
What happenned?
Thanks
I am surprised that he never fucked the principal at school. You would think that he would want get back at the staff that allowed he to be abused.
This story is so ridiculous, so over the top outrageous. It's also hilarious to the point of making me laugh out loud several times. The writing is witty and clever. In short, it's amazing!
Damn good ,I was expecting one thing and got another it was drawn in I followed the character so close I felt what he felt ,I found myself laughing out loud at the puns ,2 thumbs way way up
I loved it. It was ridiculous but charming. I enjoyed the character development and all the different fetishes used. I didn't care much for the protagonists having a massive dong, but the other males getting sex made up for it. I don't like cucks getting forced into celibacy, so thanks for that
5/5 + bookmark + follow author. 7/5
Nato_
Is it bad that I think this should be turned into a movie trilogy?
The movie trailers are a wonderful touch. :-)
I love the creative revenge. Its deep.
The treasure Hu ter saga was a cherry on top.
Well, I was almost laughing out loud about the whole situation. It would be nice to have an ending with Danny finally leaving everyone behind. Trying to keep track of every relationship must be exhausting even for Danny. What happens if Danny leaves or loses his ability to screw with everyone's mind? Creative imagination is one thing however the twists and turns were dizzy reading. What happens to other people that the Cooper's were involved with before having their minds turned to mush by Danny? Nobody thought nothing was not quite right? It started out with a good revenge plan but devolved into a Keystone cops theme.
THIS, has to be the one and only TRUE masterpiece of this place.
You derserve all the praise for this. And money too.
Thank you!
This story is the best one i've read in months.
Please give us more cummy yummy chapters and the 5 star ratings will continue. Bet on it!
if Mr. Cooper would still be his sister, jason's aunt, or other family members would become danny's whores
My friend if you write more of this tale, it would be amazing... maybe get Greg to lose his house and or his wife. Maybe introduce Libby to the gloryhole. Thanks
Laughed my ass off at the ridiculous situations, especially the movie trailers. Get the man some acid-proof/ blade-proof pants, somebody! And when he falls outa bed each morning stopping the alarm... One of these days, he's gonna kosh himself good and LOSE his magic mind-bending brain bump... Can Danny postulate, "Not everyone is a worthy member of 'Team Dugan'; My Dad is a complete and utter loser. If Jason was judging me by that standard, it's no wonder he hated me; I would, too." five stars all thruout. eagerly awaiting caapter 3.
Anon56
Wow....the best story I have read for a long time....please consider writing a follow on!
lol how are people going to say i hope this isnt the end when it hasnt seen an update since 2018? its beyond dead.
And with that ending, on the revenge goes, even though the story ends. Excellent tale.
Nicequip last did a poem in June this year. I sure wish he would pick this back up. We all need to message him to start this again.
Excellent story overall, but an epilog would have been great. I thought Danny & his mom were going to move into the mansion. Then he'd marry Mandy, Jadon would marry Beth and then Danny would get all the girls pregnant. The ultimate cuckold.
I loved this story. It could use one more chapter or more to tie it all together.
Some great stuff in this. S-tier dialogue at times. The humiliation of Jason is just priceless. And the sheer absurdity of some of the situations is genius. Like fucking the guys wife and telling him he's just finishing up after filling all 3 holes and he's basically like "that's cool".
Disappointed that Mandy let her dad fuck her, even if it was disappointingly short. There should be some loyalty put into the mind control so they don't fuck other people :( Same thing with Beth later.
"You look like a fucking hooker!" "Aw! Thanks, babe! That's so sweet!" I love this shit.
Would have been even more satisfying if Beth had been a virgin but I guess it's not plausible to be with Jason for 3 years and not give it up. Too bad. The revenge would have been extra-sweet to know his long-term girlfriend gave her cherry to her nemesis right in front of him. The pain and humiliation would have been insane.
As usual, Lori's taunts are the best. "She looks like she has cerebral palsy" in reference to Libby's convulsing during her mind-blowing orgasm. Fucking hell where do you come up with this stuff? It's awesome.
I really, really hope there's a part 3 coming. That rumble scene near the end there was just... priceless. It can't end here. This is just too damn good to stop. Please post part 3 ASAP! My need for it compares to Libby's and Jason's addiction. OK well not quite as bad, but you get the idea.
Absolutely hillarious.
And maybe the mother has some thoughts how to improve on Danny's plans?
And surely the Cooper dynasty has to carry on, but how to get Janice pregnant?
I am going to go watch the bearded man roller skate
It's January and I am from Canada.
Great story, hopefully you write one more chapter.
3/5 overall; 5/5 chapter 1
Chapter 2 is just overdone, ch1 is smooth and funny, ch2 is less humor, more humiliation (including incest, quite obsolete if MC actually liked Mandy).
With no good ideas forward, story was much better off with ch1 only
This is one of the best works of comedic satire on the entire site! Excellent work!
something about this story reminds me of those american pie like movies.. this was a fun read! please keep it going
Nicequip emailed out a beta of Part 3 back in 2022, so if you send him a message through Lit's "Contact Author" feature, then he may send it to you. Solid entry that was over 50k words in length.
This still might the greatest erotica stories in existence!
If GioSolo is right and there really exists a beta of part 3, I would really see it as a service to humanity if it gets published as well. Please Nicequip, please have a heart as big as your writing talent <3
So fucking absa lootely absurd and extremely funny and had me in hysterics doing belly laughs... would make a great porno film?.?....?.........