All Comments on 'Making a Devil out of Me'

Need more of it

The psychological conflict between a man and his penis. I want to feel that pain again. Thanks for such a creative story. Perhaps if the waitress next went after the girlfriend you may have a new twist,

really....Wow!

Whoever the hell u are, U made me cum like crazy. FUCKING AWESOME :)

This was RIDICULOUSLY hot! I couldn't stop reading. Geeeeesus!

can you make another please like a sequel this was so hot there has to be more

This is storytelling at its finest, very well done

That was...Amazing. Much better grammar & spelling, and the overall plot just blew me away. Damn.

I've concluded that you're the best author on this site. I love your choice of fantasies and everything about your writing. I've read all your stuff and am wishing for more!

That was SOOOO HOT! Are you planning to write another chapter? Please do! You can't just leave us hanging like this! PLEASE!

That fucking little hot tease...

*unzips*

That has to be the hottest thing I have ever read...well done!

So. Fucking. Hot.

Give us more!

Tht was fuckong hot def one of my favorites

I can't believe I read all four pages when I had other things to do. Started it and had to finish it. Great job!

DAMN i really liked this one. It's hard being a teenage nympho girl x-x

Defenetly the hottest story I have ever read!!!! Amazing!!

Totally fantastic story! The stuff all great sex fantasies are made of. Any chance on seeing a sequel?

this was so hot ........absolutely fantastic ,kept me hard for hours ..........wonderful

Stephen J sjhallahan@verizon.net

This is extremely hot. I'm not even into the whole cheating thing, but I enjoyed every minute of the story!

Some of the dialogue seemed kinda weird to me though, for example, the way the guy talked. He seemed almost antisocial sometimes, with all the 'um's and "uh"s, kinda weird. Other than that, perfect !

i applaud you good sir

...with a great crescendo. i guess the build-up of the story required the length of it, but it was already pretty clear how torn he was in the beginning. all the "do i want her -yes, no, it's wrong, but i got a hard-on"-repetitions were a little much. 4 stars for the mind-games of Alyssa. btw, there are more Alyssas out there than most people would dare to imagine. i know the type and what you did here ---could have been much "worse" on her part.

P.S.: maybe this is where the story really belongs -in the mind-control section rather than in the non-consent section.

Why people think it's cool to start sentences with "So", when nothing has been said before beats me. It isn't, it shows a lack of imagination and poor command of English.

very hot story

Wat happens next?

I'm in love with Alyssa.

Great story, definitely one of the best I've read.

God, I love the dirty talking, force myself on you attitude of Alyssa's. Dam, that was incredibly hot.

Nevermind the little grammatical error mentiond. This is by far one of the best plots and hottest stories I'v ever read. -Keep writing!

Ho... ly... crap! absolutely amazing. extremely hot and sexy, well done!

This is hot in so many ways, so intense. Thank you for sharing such a sexual story with the readers.

Loved this story! More encounters would be wonderful. She might come to his work place again and they could go into the cafeteria. No telling what she might do to him under the table. I was hard the whole way through. Many thanks.

This has been a longtime favourite of mine, thanks!

Also, I love that 'burger' is one of the tags lol.

The writing is good enough but I really can't stand cheaters. And it is in the wrong section.

Wow this was really good. Really liked it, loved the details, wish u would do a sequel!!! Keep it up dude!!

Great read. Very detailed. Will look for more if your writings. Thanks

Love that he couldn't resist that final fuck....

You are such an excellent writer!! I don't usually comment on stories, but yours is so awesome that I just couldn't help myself. It was so easy for me to visualize and feel every single thing that you were describing - that is a skill even some of the greats don't have. Your writing drew me into the story and made me feel every single emotion so thoroughly that it made me wish I had a dick so that I could fuck that bitch's brains out!!!

what a good story!

I loved the teasing, the manipulation, the way Alyssa controlled him, and the battle he had with himself.

Nicely done!

Omg! I jacked off so much my cum filled a bucket!!!

I love erotic stories and have read many. This is the first time I have left a comment. That story was steaming hot!

for mixed reviews.

some liked it in spite of the flaws.

some liked it because of the flaws.

I didn't like one whit.

Man, best story book I eva read. I came harder than shrek on steroids. BTW I am Shrek.

It was brilliant and I enjoyed that fantasy of yours keep writing you will be successful

that I have noticed. The hotter your girlfriend is the more interested other women seem to be. Maybe they think you must have something going on or ...

I just started exploring this site and hadn't found anything that did much for me.

That is until I read this story! I was just laying in bed next to my sleeping husband and reading to be reading, not expecting to get so hot and bothered! I couldn't lay still so I went into the bathroom so I didn't wake my husband. The anticipation rose and fell, rose and fell, and ROSE...! I came right along with Alyssa and didn't stop until she left his apartment! OH LORD, I NEEDED THAT - thank you!

When she handcuffs herself to the post? Go into the garage, grab a screwdriver, remove the cuffs, put them in her purse and shove her out the door. To do anything else was just ludicrous and brainless. No stars for this exercise in stupidity.

I'd love to be a criminal in your country where you can use a screwdriver to remove handcuffs. It's like you never ever worked with hardened steel or just live in toys r us.

I love your stories. One of my favorite writers. So Erotic!

He is still not the devil that was the promised in the story. Make him go to her home without her being there and then when she reaches home he should just take her raw and make her scream. He would be very rough with her. Giving her hickey after hickey and mark her. And then come in her and cunt and then fuck her rough amr and hard without lubrication in her ass. And come in her ass. Then he will be the devil. Another line if story can be be the girlfriend also wants him to take revenge and joins the him in this.

I loved it!

Fantastic as usual. Without doubt, you are one of the best writers on this site. Would be lovely if you decided to write again.

That was so fucking fine~ You are the bomb in teasing! Kudos, author. You are amazing.

Next story - Alyssa picked her visit at just the right time (for her). Dude was an idiot giving in. Kristin finds out the hard way that her man has become a father...

I am just shaking my head at the commenter saying that he should've beaten her up. What world do you live in where that wouldn't end up with him behind bars for attempted murder? A picture doesn't prove breaking and entering or that she voluntarily cuffed herself. Go luck trying to live in today's society with a woman abuser label.

Shout out to that one anon for leaving the dumbest comment this website has ever seen. This is adult fanfic, mate, not MMA on women.

Just read the first page, skipped to the last one to immediately favorite it before continuing. It's that hot! Alyssa is dripping with sensuality.

Such a sexy siren like Allyssa doesn't exist outside of fantasy.

Caught in a situation like that, you should be fucking your girlfriend six ways from Sunday just to reclaim you own body, and hers.

What a tense erotic story. * * * * *

Great, hot story.

Of course it won't end there, and the author left it to our own brains to imagine what will happen afterwards, though I would really enjoy a chapter 2.

All in all, a nice, sizzling hot fantasy !

Many thanks to the writer for sharing with us his talent, time, and imagination.

Wow!! This story line was one of the best I’ve ever had the pleasure of reading!! To the author, I surely hope you continue writing, it only going to get better! Thank you for sharing!! WOW!!!

This story was crazy good when it came out years ago, and is still crazy hot. It is so easy to imagine yourself in the place of the writer, trying but unable to resist this smokin' hot sexy little tease. There might be other stories I like as much as this one, but none better.

I don't see what everyone else is excited about. Guy has girlfriend, guy willingly cheats on girlfriend; yes willingly, when he didn't tell her about getting cornered in the bathroom when he could have easily pushed past the slut, went first to the manager to complain, then told his girlfriend he was delayed by complaining about the slut to her boss, then allows himself to be manipulated by said slut.

Another guy being led around by his dick buy a hose-bag when he has a lady at home.

Move along, nothing to see here...

A cute story but a little over the top. He could easily (well, not easily) resisted her and should have told his girlfriend but like most guys, he doesn’t know how to confess to his girlfriend.

Would love to find out that it was a honey trap set up by Kristen... 5 stars

This is an amazing story! It has that slow burn going on that’s so sexy. I came across it years ago and then tried to find it for a very long time. I tried every keyword I could think of to find this story but couldn’t. I am still so surprised that this showed up today! Please write more xx

Too frustrating! The ass should have talked to his girl the first time anything happened.

Communication in all these stories is the solution every author ignores. Makes it too frustrating to enjoy.

Bill S.

Stupid. He could have just left her handcuffed & waited for his girl to come home & talked to her about it.

Don’t listen to the haters. Your stories are all hot as fuck

Great story! I loved how you described his reluctance and inner conflict. Great sex too!

Fantastic. Your stories are exactly what im into. Keep um coming!

This was awesome! I laughed the whole way through! The different situations she was putting him in lol too funny!

Which is why one should learn how to pick handcuffs.

It's not very hard.

Great story. Sexy reluctance. He just couldn't help himself

Ok having a hard time with this one because I don’t like the 2 main characters. Still I gave it 4 stars because it is a well written story with interesting and sexy situations. Just didn’t like either character.

Part II needed!

We had a saying in my day, a stiff dick don’t have a conscious. I would have given in to her right away. We would get together as often as possible. I love her!!!

Fantasy. How could a cute youth obsessively stalk and seduce an older fan? Still it is an older guy bucket list. Rejuvenation to youth?

A Playboy after dark story. Mean, Motivation, and opportunity. Well motivation must be more than nymphomania to target this shmoe. Maybe if he could talk his Kristen into a threesome like the Florida head of the Republican Party accused of Rape? Better than a threesome with Governor Ron DeSantis, eh?

This is total BS. The guy's not even MARRIED, and he RESISTS a hot woman?!! This author doesn't even bother with descriptions of gfs. Why should readers believe the gfs are worth remaining faithful to?