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Who am I to refuse a lady?
I was going to keep up with the foreplay - play with those amazing breasts, kiss her all over, kiss away the last traces of her red lipstick - but she forced me back onto the couch and was on top of me the very second I got the condom on.
It was my first time having sex with a human woman - damn, my life had become batshit insane - and my first time with a condom. It wasn't a disappointment, not really, even though I had sort of developed high standards already. If Rosie's pussy was like the finest sirloin steak prepared by an internationally renowned chef, Ana's was just a beef paddy from the supermarket. Flattering comparison, sure, but the point is: when you're hungry, a home-cooked beef burger is pretty damned fantastic.
After a night of teasing, flirting and beautiful women, I was pretty fucking hungry.
I had to do the foreplay things - push her dress out of the way, palm her swaying titties, pull her in for a deep kiss - while she rode me. The struggle is real.
Hot as she was, Ana was no succubus, and she got tired before long. I turned us around, lay her on the couch, and started fucking her harder. Either Rosie really did spike her drink or I'm not completely awful at sex, because she was shivering out another climax into the couch cushions before long.
I lay down atop her and enjoyed her breasts for a while before we relocated to her bedroom. Rosie's enhancements were worth their weight in gold; as great as the sex was, I didn't come through four position changes and two panting, kissing breaks for our muscles to recover. There were birds crowing outside by the time I came to the point of no return. The condom had broken at some point, so I was titfucking Ana as best as we could with only her spit, sweat and pussy juices for lube. Prior preparation prevents piss-poor performance, but the girl had enthusiasm. When a bit of grey light came through the window and showed me her face with black hair in disarray, saliva smeared around her mouth and dark eyes delirious from lust, it pushed me over the edge.
"I'm gonna cum."
"Fucking finally!"
I slapped her cheek, not quite as gently as teasing would dictate. "Rude." She hissed in response, but didn't seem offended. "Where do you want it?" I asked.
She let go of her tits and raised her head, sucking the tip of my dick between her lips, grabbing it and jerking me off. "Come in my mouth, I've never... please come in my mouth."
"That's better," I said, and followed my orders like a good soldier.
+++++Closing Notes+++++
Thanks to everyone who made it through to the end! Votes, comments and feedback are also appreciated, although I'm pretty awful at replying to the latter two. If I confess to that sin, do I still go to hell for it?
So Eric has successfully navigated a bar pick-up, and Rosie has managed to keep all her clothes on for several consecutive hours. Next, we'll see how she finished her own Saturday night. That chapter should be finished soon, but I feel like I've said that before...
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- COMMENTS
jkthekatover 2 years agoIt really is enjoyable! And I get names mixed up too when I write- even proofing 3 times!
Anonymousover 5 years agoIf you ever decide to do a re-write/polish for any purpose, you need to fix a character name problem in the scene where Ana and Heaven are introduced.
You introduce Ana's companion as Heaven, then within a sentence, or two, you refer to her as Rachel. A bit confusing.
Also, when you give a character an abnormal name, which 'Heaven' certainly is, you need to work in a back story, and let readers know if it is a given name, chosen nickname, or an earned, or unearned, nickname, assigned by others.
This sort of character name development doesn't need to be immediate, but should take place in the first portion of a character's plot life. The timing of depends on the character's overall life in the story arc; though if the character is a 'throw-away', then there's not much sense in giving them an abnormal name, in the first place, unless you're using it as a device to move the plot in a specific direction, and is essential as such a device.
Not related, just something I have noticed is a half dozen, or so, instances where you have used region, or country related idioms. IE: you've placed your tale in Austin, but use several obvious UK, (or European), terms or names. I haven't read your bio, (didn't plan on adding this part when I started this comment), but my guess is you are from the UK, and the idioms were used without realizing their inconguity to the story's locale.
Just to make it all the more challenging, the US has uniquely regional idioms and colloquial terms/phrases.
One of the more recent is the use of 'uni', when referring to the university several characters will soon be attending. I'm not certain if that is solely a UK/European term, but it is not a common US term, (I'm from the NW US, and it is not used here; my gut tells me it isn't a Texas term, either. Texas does have a tendency toward it's own terms, which adds another layer of difficulty.
Hope this helps, with this, or other writing(s).
Thanks for sharing your imagination, and especially, thanks for all the work it takes to get a story ready for submission.
Regards,
GeoD
Anonymousalmost 8 years ago"On your first night together, fuck her like it's her last fuck. Fuck her so good and so hard that she's left a quivering mass of shaking flesh and sex fluids."
