All Comments on 'Mom's Sweaty Ride Pt. 01'

Omg, people try to critique a story. Its just a sexy story, enjoy the dam thing. If it gets you off, great, if not change stories.

A very hot story that I enjoyed very much but it needs better proof reading. It seems that you may have changed from third person to first person but there are many places where the wrong pronouns are used. I don't know why you labeled the first part Pt 1 and the others Ch 2 etc but it makes them appear in the wrong order.