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"Soon Ken, they will come. We're deep inside their hunting ground," said Brit to the mercenary team leader.
"Then let them Brit, I'm sure the men are ready for them. How about your people?"
She looked back towards Kyle and Tom who have been busy monitoring their video equipment having their crossbows slung around their body.
"They're ready as they can be Ken."
"Good, Brit I don't want anything to happen with you. I want you to be with your people. Carlos, Marion, and Shintaro will be task to protect your people and you," he said to her in sincerity and worry as he pointed to the three men armed with the 5.56mm Minimi SAW rifle.
"Ken, I want you to be safe too, ok," she looked around, seeing that no one is looking at them she kissed his lips and smiled.
"I will Brit," he tapped his FN-SCAR 5.56mm assault rifle and smiled in return, "Now, go back to them and wait for what may happen."
- COMMENTS
Anonymousabout 13 years agoit needs A LOT of editing..other than that it's pretty good..^-^
Anonymousover 13 years agoGood story but I take it that English is not your first language. Need major editing.
Anonymousover 15 years agoYou need an editor. You have a decent enough storyline, but mis-spellings and tangled descriptions make it difficult to read. You also need to put yourself into the heads of more of your characters. Would any elite fighters go into action willingly with armaments supplied by an academic? That's the appearance from their briefing at Oxford. And no mention of knives?
Get an editor and keep writing. You have excellent prospects for growing into a first class author!
