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Click hereShe was fortunate that security was so lax in the castle, but then, King Connor had taken it with help from the inside. Having been greeted as a liberator, there hadn't been any need to heavy security, at least, not until now. Susannah was nearly out of breath by the time she made it to the servant's quarters as she was walking so fast it was almost a jog. As passed through the kitchen, she heard the great cry of alarm over the fire erupt behind her. She dashed through the servant's entrance, which had never been bricked over since there wasn't a siege. It closed behind her not a moment too soon, as she could hear the servants rising from bed and rushing to help combat the fire.
Susannah hugged the wall surrounding the castle as she made her way towards the gate. The plan was going as expected, and the guards on duty were running up towards the keep. She darted through the gate as fast as she could manage. As she crossed the drawbridge, she heard a voice cry out.
"You there, stop!"
She ran faster, and some sixth sense made her dart to the left, just in time to avoid the arrow whistling through the air towards her. Her heart leapt to her throat as she fled into the city. She hoped that the guard who spotted her wouldn't be heard over the din of the firefighters. Even though she was running as fast as she could, fear made her feel like she was running with lead boots on, and that every step she took was too slow and too loud.
Tristan was waiting for her several streets down from the market place. He threw a long, hooded cloak at her and helped her climb atop a horse. "Come Your Grace, we must leave before they seal the city."
"Yes, we have to hurry. They spotted me as I left the castle."
"They saw you?" Tristan sighed. "Very well, come on, no time to lose."
"Where are we going? Where will you hide me?"
"We're off to one of the raider camps. Congratulations, Your Grace, you'd just joined the resistance."
- COMMENTS
Bladenessover 9 years agoGlad you are back OrcDominion!
The current chapter has its high points but I think the story is a bit slow right now. The story/plot is intriguing right now and building up quite nicely. Can't wait to see what is in store. If I were to compare it to something like Game of Thrones, I think lots of cool plot lines are going on but the characters just don't feel as fleshed out. More big twists would be nice as well. I might not be the best with these types of stories but I do get lost at times with the different concurrent plots. I love that you are attentive to details in keeping a nice low fantasy world.
As for the bad end comments, I am in full agreement. I do get on this site to read stories that are very dark and dirty stories. Not a fan of the sensual human/orc scenes as much as the more nonconsent/reluctance type. Hope you have more orcs subjugating humans scene and lots of futile human rebellions. :)
Again thanks for writing and love your works!
emmakendrick01over 9 years agoI was one of the ones that commented on a less bad end for Jeannette as I wanted to see her still remain in power and have total control. The idea of a powerful queen who submits to orcs nightly sounds very interesting. Sort of a woman who wished to be dominated because her public life has her dominating others so much. However I am fully endorsing a very bad end as an alternate ending/universe type scenario. I really look forward to reading it!
emmakendrick01over 9 years agoI love the idea of an alternate universe for chapter 12, something along the lines of what the first poster said and what you originally had in mind. It need not be canon, but it would definitely be a fun read and allow you to share your original vision with everyone without having to affect your main story. Public humiliation and lots and lots of gangbangs are what I would love to see. I want to see how far her depravity goes and how much of a sex slave/whore she can become. Perhaps she can be used by Turrogg as he goes on a victory tour and allow her to be shared among his men and human men in the areas they go to? Or maybe have her thrown to Hessen prisoners to allow them to have a little fun after they've been conquered. I want to see her lust brought out completely and see her beg for sex. Of course, details details details!
These are one of my favorite series and I find the rebellion to be very good, though a bit light on the sex (I personally loved the chapters where Jeannette was shared among several men/orcs, but that is my own preference.) I'd also like to see some more vaginal or DP sex with men since she can't have any in the rebellion due to the purity of the royal line (though this chapter help make amends for that!)
Anonymousover 9 years agoI'd actually like a bad end. Maybe even have the Queen be reduced to a member of his harem with other noble figures.
OrcDominionover 9 years agoAuthorThanks for commenting, even if you put me in a little quandry. Most people wanted the end to be less bad. Your end is actually closer to what I originally intended. If enough people comment maybe I will do a bad end after all.
