Takeover Ch. 01

Still one of my favourites. Weaving in the psychological lives of the characters is so hot, and gives us so many opportunities to experience and explore power dynamic.

Neither character is a cookie-cutter caricicture either. Such a good find.

Hmmmm wimpy beta males acceding to Femdom Fantasies no thanks

Meh. Reads like a list of bullet points. Has possibilities, and should be re-written in third person.

Wasn’t sure what to expect, but wow...

This was cute. I was really hoping that she would be wearing a dark colored dress and he would be wearing white, but otherwise. Loving this.

I will say that this is a different spin on what I normally read but it doesn't have to be bad. It is a good concept and I did enjoy it. Not bad. I will say 4.5 stars. It's good.

I'm guessing this is a world where women are the dominant ones, nice work.

Although if you were planning for a world where social evolution took another turn, clothing would be drastically different, male clothes would be tailored to show off the male physique(open shirts etc. Like that Star trek episode) and felae clothes would hide the female form making them looser fitting or binding the bust like a kimono.

Another thing that seemed out of place (unless biological evolution in your story is different too) was the feel I got that the woman was not only taller but stronger than the man. Unless humans evolved differently, or the characters aren't human to begin with; this carries forward into some of the husband's reactions.

Now, most of the way he reacts is completely believable, and the apprehension he shows for sex is completely like that from an innocent male virgin, but I found his lack of accnowledgement of his own physical arousal strange, I'm assuming guys still get errections in your world, unlike female arousal, male arrousal is easier to derect my the one getting arroused.

Consider each of those expressions a star 'cause it's something new that I read here, though not necessarily 'cause I like it, but it's nice to read something different sometimes, man.

You are a fine writer. Loving the approach, the role reversal. Feels like a scene from early 20th century, with genders reversed.

I love the role reversal! Will be waiting to see how this pans out. Pleasantly surprised with the happenings.