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Click hereThe bow and quiver was gone. There was one naked arrow left, and there was a note spiked on it, on pink paper of some kind. It said,
My mistake, but what's done is done, and it's not the first mistake I've ever made. I'm leaving you one arrow. Do the right thing. [signed] C.
So that's where I'm at now. Gina's still asleep, and I'm lying with my arm around her, the arrow in my hand. It's pink, about a foot long, thin, and terribly sharp. This one hasn't evaporated.
I'd do it myself, but I know she has to be the one, just like I was the one who did it to her. If I did it to myself, there's no telling what would happen. Maybe I'd see a picture in a magazine, or maybe I'd spend the rest of my life masturbating.
I've given it a lot of thought: free will, true love, infatuation, lust, love at first sight: all that stuff. But what it seems to come down to is this: I want to feel about her like she felt about me. In this world of throw-away sex and overnight affairs, I want to know that kind of passion for someone. I want to be crazy in love like that. So when she wakes up, I'm going to make her do it.
Take that arrow and drive it right into my heart.
Everyone should be so lucky.
- COMMENTS
fireballxl5about 19 years agoI loved this story. You certainly have a command of the language, and the wit to find refreshingly original metaphors.
Quiet Listeneralmost 20 years agoWell writen. The story flows well. The plot isn't terribly new, but this IS Literotica, an let's face it, there are only so many plots. Good dialog. What I like best, however, is the true understanding of the nature of Cupid's arrows. If anyone read Greek and Roman mythology anymore, the mischevious love god wouldn't show up on as many Hallmark cards. This is a gem, and should have won. Keep writing!
ktr30about 20 years agoExcellent story - great mix of fantasy and reality. Very glad to have read it! Will be looking for more of your work, KTR
Anonymousabout 20 years agoThe combination of romance and lust with a loving ending really pleased me. Thanks!
Anonymousabout 20 years agoWith this story you've definately got a place inside my heart
You are a good writer. A seldom thing on this kind of boards. In my book you'd've got 1st place.
Keep writing!
Anonymousabout 20 years agoAn erotic story which was so very romantic too. A very rare combination and you did a great job. Dont stop writing !
ChemE_studentover 20 years agoAh, darling, you just never fail. What a pleasure to know that there are such talented people in the world! Still, I can't help but envy your ability to express yourself; the world would be much more satisfying if we all had your imagination and inspiration. I'll keep reading these stories forever.
Anonymousover 20 years agoReally good plot line and nice ending. A little more build up might have been nice - I guess I didn't want the story to get over so quickly. Keep 'em coming!
Anonymousover 20 years agoI can't believe this story didn't win first place! This was by far the best story I read of the three. I enjoyed them of course but this story had all the right elements. Comedy, sexuality, fantasy and the right amount of ribald escapades flavored this delightful tale. Well done!
Anonymousover 20 years agoThis was darling!! ...WOW. Thank you for the resonating shot of depth. Thank you for the inspiration in the character of Gina (I'm a woman).
shereadsover 20 years agoWhat a lovely Valentine's Day gift for Amelia...I wonder Elliot will get from her...?
Anonymousover 20 years agoMissed it before Glad I didn't today. This is wonderful. It is hot, charming funny and leaves you wondering what will happen next. A true classic romance story with a hot biting edge. Good job
Anonymousover 20 years agoDear Dr. Mabeuse: Third Place? Something is very wrong, here. I don't mean to diss the winners or take away their thunder...but all the thunder is in YOUR creative little story. I laughed out loud, reading it with my husband. And I don't often laugh out loud.
You have skillfully crafted a charming, funny, clever (but not an oh-so-clever) story, with great dialogue and an engaging plot. I'm really not much for most pornographic stories. Women are harder to please, I believe. We want more than descriptions of the sex act. We want a plot. We want believeable characters. We want to lose ourselves in the storyline. In just a few pages, your story achieves all that. I'd place you in a whole different genre: erotic comedy. Thanks for the fun! As I said, I'm shocked you didn't win.
powderpinkangelover 20 years ago...in not only romance but well written erotica. Another wonderful story dr.M with an enviable balance of depth and heat. Thank you for sharing. Much love, Angel x
