Note: You can change font size, font face, and turn on dark mode by clicking the "A" icon tab in the Story Info Box.
You can temporarily switch back to a Classic Literotica® experience during our ongoing public Beta testing. Please consider leaving feedback on issues you experience or suggest improvements.
Click here"On the Vulpus plains."
"Illia--" begins Atlas, only to be cut off.
"We were approached by an elf claiming to know Atlas' father. Apparently, these claims were the truth." All eyes turn to the thief who leans against the table, a heavy sigh escaping him in response. "Why do these men need your blood?"
"Doran knew my mother...she was a Terin. To hear her tell it, only someone with the blood of a Terin can enter the city. They'll need me to get into the city and then..." He offers only a shrug in response. "All I know is that they frightened my mother enough to make her flee across the desert with me in tow and then hide me away."
"Well...none of that matters if we have no idea how to GET to the city, Atlas," replies Kale.
"That's not a problem. There's a woman here in the city who has that knowledge...all we have to do is find her."
"Is that all?" Atlas smirks a bit. "Even if such a woman existed...why would she simply give us that information?"
"Just a feeling..."
Your ability to create a story, build characters, the sorrow ring terrains and environment is phenomenal, it makes it easy for my minds eyes to actually see the story happening. I don't know why you stopped but I want you to know that you're a great writer, you're not perfect just like every other human out there but you're really good. You need an experienced editor to help in your weak areas Please help us find where you publish so we can locate you, I bet you improved in leaps and bounds. It's 2022 now, imagine the progress you must have made since 2015. You're amazing👍👍
Story is incomplete
It is also immensely irritating. You never answer any questions, just continually make more and then you abandon the story. I usually mentally wish horrible things writers that do this. Too bad we can't flag abandoned stories so that others wouldn't waste their time on writers who can't finish what they start.
Get an editor. You aren't the worst but the errors detract
once again a good story started and not finished . That seems to happen a lot on here
dam another great story left unfinished willl be checking back keep up good work