The Talons of a Dark Heart Ch. 11

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Cheers and Tears,

~Talyis

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AnonymousAnonymousabout 8 years ago
The story was...

Really good, but I felt like the ending didn't do it justice.

magevmagevalmost 10 years ago
So sad...

This is the first story on this site that has made me cry from the very first chapter to the last. Heart-wrenching...

AnonymousAnonymousabout 10 years ago
Sad Ending

I really loved the way this story was written and it was amazing how they found love but I fell that her dieing is like a punch to the gut for everyone. It feels so sad knowing that even though he has moved on and has his daughter, he will never hold her again. I like this story and I feel that in my heart she didn't die in the story but lives with him as queen.

AnonymousAnonymousover 11 years ago
Ehhhh

I personally didn't like the ending, because after she went through traumatic events, depression, and emotional scaring she dies!! I knew she was going to die when she continually got sick. I love all the other stories but I wish she didn't have to die! I think it would've been more dramatic if umma died and then the two love birds could live happily together. Other than the predictable ending I enjoyed this story.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 12 years ago
Sequel?

The whole series was sad as a whole, especially in Talyis's point of view. Imagine being so emotionally scarred as to be terrified of loving ones soulmate because you literally CAN'T be hurt anymore or else you would die merely of losing the will to live. Anyway, please make a sequel if you can, preferably in a happier setting.

NightpleasureNightpleasureover 12 years ago

I absolutely loved this story. I wa in tears at the end. Great work.

AnonymousAnonymousover 12 years ago

Absolutely Amazing story... please continue to write, you have a true gift.

AnonymousAnonymousover 12 years ago
Alternate Ending Please!!

I have read this more than 15 times.Ilove it but I always want to cry.Please for all of us who been through hell with our mates and are still together please write an alternate ending for Talyis and Novak.PLEASE!

blue_eyed_foxblue_eyed_foxover 12 years ago
nooo

It was beautiful. Even though the ending wasn't what I wanted, it was beautiful. I just wished there could have been a 'happily ever after.'

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 13 years ago
Alternate Ending Please

Please write an alternate ending.The kings behavior; although despicable was normal for that time.She was his slave...to do with as he wished.But how would she be able to rule as queen with all of her rapists working(residing?)in the castle with her?What king would make a queen of the woman he gave to his men to rape?

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