All Comments on 'Three Square Meals Ch. 070'

Raymond E. Feist wrote the Riftworld series beginning with Sorcerer's Apprentice. In this series, his best friend was Thomas who, over time, became a demigod (Valeru). It was less painful to read about Thomas' development from human to demigod. It seems that John could be a Jedi knight now - superspeed, electric sword, and telekinesis. But he never practices that. He is also a marine, and it seems that Alyssa and Sakura (at least) maybe better with guns than him? He seems to be picking up magic but hardly ever pushes himself and then only at the behest of the real boss, Alyssa. I hope he accepts who he is soon as this seems really slow. The author has made it clear that all the girls love John. Even so, with the repeated term of 'lover' and routine lesbianism, sometimes I get the feeling that this is a group of lesbians with a boy toy...

I have reread this entire over three times now, and parts of it several more times than that. I was struck this time through that when John and Sakura went to the new Dojo, the paragon training suits and weapons were made from Invectium, this might have been the last time that this was ever mentioned. It has even been said that the training gear was Crystal Alyssium later on in the series... Too bad, as I rather like their use of the very good, but lesser material (at least until it ran out). And to use it for strong and light gun frames as well as other gadgets and gear that Dana keeps whipping out; Save the Crystal AlyssIum for the Armor and such... Anyway, this was a bit of dropped or glossed over continuity, just FYI. And Tef, when you are doing your rewrites prior to book publishing, somewhere during/after this next refit, you could make some comment about no longer bothering to carry Invectium on board the ship. ;-) TTFN

A fairly decent editor would have carved 15 to 16 pages out of this 18 page chapter. The minutia is mind-numbing, the sex repetitive and boring, but your battle scenes are breathtaking. Tom Clancy will tell you a sub's new crew drilled for 19 hours. He'll tell you what they gained during those practice runs, but he doesn't force his readers to suffer through 19 hours of every detail that occurred in that time frame.

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Get a real editor and Hollywood will be wanting a screenplay.

Oh yeah! a screenplay for Three Square Meals, ... a long, long, long series, (10 seasons? or more?) on Netflix or some such, ... It might need to be Animated though, partly for cost, what with multiple worlds, aliens, space battles etcetera, ... and that it all takes place in a few months (TSM time) and live actors would age too rapidly through the seasons. And yes, this would be markedly better than 90% of the regular nonsense Hollywood puts out. ;-) TTFN

Why do they all asume that Tashana needs to be saved? And if she needs to be saved i do not think that a Progenitor is the right persoon. When she really knows that much about Progenitors she will not trust John.

Besides not trusting John she wil hate her mom and sister.

We all know how the story ends, John will fuck twins. I'm juist surprised no one is smart enough to look at the matter through Tashana's eyes. They are all very intelligent but wisdom is hard to find.

Great to see the girls and John developing but Dana's language gets more colourful by the instalment 😂😂😂. Maybe too much sex but this is Literotica, what do readers expect.

Okay, prepare for a ***spoiler alert*** regarding John (a new Progenitor) and his (Terran) Matriarch, four more Terrans, a Nymph and a Maliri onboard the Invictus to round out his current gallant crew, .... he also has his Maliri Matriarch (Edraele), her 3 bodyguards, and a little over 80 more Genthelas Shipyard based Maliri that only got a swallow of his cum (about 1/20th of a load), .... all of his 'wards', not 'thralls', generate more psychic energy for John than the typical thralls do, even the Maliri engineers, with a single swallow provide many times the psychic power to Alyssa and then John, .... by not knowing how the 'regular' Progenitors do it, he did his new recruits way better, and helped out all of his wounded little birds too, ... I just wonder how many thousands of 'normal' thralls' Eldritch power each member of John's crew/family generates in comparison, ... some interesting thoughts, ..., this was a good consolidation chapter, .... ;-) TTFN

I found this chapter to be discouraging for John. He is led around like a puppy to be trained and corrected by a bunch of women who he has made more powerful than himself. I found their claim of love for him to be unconvincing. Their love of girlfriend was realistic. Sex they give does not equal love. Alissa's behavior made me think this. She seems to enjoy her girlfriends feelings of sex with John more than her spending time with him! Felt he was treated like the energized bunny for their power. He is now obliged to service them all emotionally and physically. They then reward him by showing him how his mother and father are evil and murders and he doesn't accept them as they desire? Made me wonder who is worse the progenitors who use women or they who use him?

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"Okay, re-activating the 'annoying little shit' drone, Mark I."

--- travel towards the Unclaimed Wastes, .... training, projects and lots of sex, ... Dana / Jade makes some more Paragon suits, ... Sakura grows into her full size, and completes her XR-75 rifle training, ... John hears some suspected, but unwelcome news about his mother, and her immediately abandoning him, all this still hurts him, ... ;-) ttfn

patiently waiting for the yellow N