All Comments on '"Your Mom is Passed Out?"'

Fun and more fun! Thank you!

Loved it

What a great story! Wild, weird, sometimes bordering on unbelievable ... and fabulous! In places the dialogue was surreal. None of the same old same old. In a way, I would describe it as the Rocky Horror Picture Show of erotica. Wow!

Story started off good but.it was quickly ruined. Just the combination of being highly unrealistic, main character being a selfish prick, and being a stereotypical low life piece of shit calling a game "faggy" while he chums down.beer and tries to.get into every single person's pants. You had sex with 5 different girls? That isn't cool. Nobody is going.to be like "You.have sex with every girl you see? Oh go's you're so cool!!". And it isn't attractive either. Just shows all you care about is sex. Good luck get ring a girlfriend that doesn't have STDs. It was good at first

But you completely and utterly ruined it. I was disappointed when the main character wasn't getting raped in.prison by a big black.guy named Bubba or get beaten the shit.out of and hung by either Bob or Jerry.

very well written and nicley put together make a nice porno movie script !

This story is almost exactly the same that happened to me, at about the same age, except I was coming to her place for swimming lessons, she was 38 and a policemens wife and the other party was her daughter, it lasted 2 yrs until I was called up for service. It was totally enjoyable, but it almost ruined me sexually as I found it really hard to have sex with a single woman, so it was a few years before I got back into the swing of it. Good Memories-- Thank You.

what a story a little of the wall but very erotic.......great writer you are.......you should write sex novels.....you have the imagination of being a great sex novelist....again good reading

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Great story! Hopefully more to come!

This was rape. What that young man did to an unconscious woman was RAPE! He violated her.

This story tells readers that abusing the body of an unconscious person is acceptable. It is NOT!

Disgusting. Immoral. Unethical.

Take it down.

Another great story; if far fetched, even for a fantasy.

Much MORE please!!!!!

I loved reading this, though I'm not sure what that says about me :P Regardless, you have quite a talent!

Please let me know if Jerry gets Danielle at mrmac at nxlink.com would love to read it.

Also let me know if you might be interested in a touch of ghost writing for a short section where I'm stuck on my fantasy story about a college reunion twister game when an aphrodisiac made from Dragon 'stuff' is secretly added to the refreshments.

Mac

Simply loved it. Thank you

Just make sure you rape a woman long enough and she will accept your love in the end. Pathetic.

How about a second chapter where we get to see what daddy does when he gets back home and reviews the security tapes? You don't think he keeps an eye on his trophy wife?

One of the funniest I’ve read. A 4 Star rating.

I’ve come back to this story several times over the years and there’s always some dink in the comments bitching about the non consent. Literally, the second sentence on the first page says, “there’s some non consent stuff in here” and the dinks read it anyway lol.

Decent story. Kinda weird how the boy has this huge mental change all of the sudden. 4/5

There’s a lot of nuance to the characters here, and I enjoyed the perverse love story aspect. Best wishes to Alex and Jill.

Not sure it is believable, but still, who knows?? Thank you.

You know hire too craft a scene better than many in here, would love a follow up

AT THE START, IT WAS RAPE,, JILL AND DANNI WERE DRUNK OR DRUGED. THIS IS WHAT TURNER ME OFF ,I READ THE STORY TO SEE HOW FAR IT WOULD GO............... THE END.

Damn! Listening to Alex explain to Jill how SHE set all that up was like listening to Sherlock Holmes patiently bringing poor slow Dr. Watson up to speed. And I am listening, by the way. Select all, share, @VoiceAloud Reader.

Alex also reminds me of Tom Sawyer. I want to see more of him.

Great story, very well crafted. Would really love a follow up or more! Thank you for taking the time and effort to write

Amazing and under-appreciated work. Loved it. Would do anything for a sequel.

It was disgusting, also totally surreal. No mature woman in her right mind would accept anything so debasing. It was a story of total disrespect,

I get it. It's just a story. If I don't like this then I should just leave. But, I really don't know man. I've seen some freaky shit, I'm telling you, but this just ain't it chief. I just... can't. I get that these rape and drugged out stories are people's fantasies, ok? It's meant to be 'empowering', right? The way you're able to dominate a woman without her telling you "NO!", the way they would never give you the time of day before? Yeah, no. Fuck that. This shit is so fucked up, god damn! Again, I'm not blaming you, I'm not blaming anyone. For example, pedophiles (NOT to draw the same comparison) exist EVERYWHERE, but as long as they try and work past that, or at the least don't act on it, they're not breaking any laws. So, my point. I urge you, if you are really into this shit, and can't get off to anything else, GET HELP. I know that you think that you'll never do anything like this in real life, but the idea is in your subconscious. People get drunk, people get high, people have lapses in judgement that they regret for the REST. OF. THEIR. LIVES. Please. For the sake of everyone who ever comes into contact with you, seek help. Get these thoughts out of your head, with professionals. There are people out there to help with this stuff. Alternatively, however, there are people who help with this stuff by locking you in prison, mental institutions, death row (depending on your location). Don't fuck yours and somebody else's (not to mention all the families involved) lives beyond repair. GET. HELP.

Hot story which I enjoyed. I'd like to read how the son gets to play with his step-sister, Danni.

this is a great story.

Hope it continues.

Rape, not a funny subject. You are writing about rape.

Your worst story to date

That was interesting and unusual, a bit like being inside the mind of a stalker or serial killer.

Hot story -- implausible but hot. Now, I'd like to know what happens with the sister, Danni?

Excellent story.

Well prepared, composed and beautifully written. Thank you for sharing this work.

excellent loved it

I must say when I read Alex and shaved/trimmed Jill's pussy and then fell asleep in her bed, that the shit would hit the fan the next morning when she finally regained consciousness. Who knew it would turn out so well lol?

Alternative ending Alex gets arrested for rape the end

PART II: showing her the love he feels, in a way only he could show her, almost singing to her, he looks down upon the woman to whom he has given his heart, no, the woman he has given his very soul to.. He gazes upon her beauty, a dream become reality to whom he he loves with reckless abandon and utters "she puts the lotion in the basket."

love to see more chapters????

Very imaginative story. The build up was well done. Crazy theme though! It was nice to see how the thought processes for the characters were developed in line with this storyline. Certainly had my attention from beginning to end!

now that was a grate read you covred all the highs and lows it was all good pleas if you can give more to this story

great story

well thought out

Such an amazing story and still begging for a series even after all these years. Please!

I don’t know why i loved all your stories that i read till now. but this one was kind of let down. You made the son kind of a cuckold and wimp. Also, at the ending she kind of apologized Alex for comforting her son. And no sex scene between mom and son ? Its in the wrong category.

wtf was that ?

Anyway i am huge fan of ur stories i have read your two mom two laps countless times. I usually don’t write these comments but i just had to say this.

Blech.

So, this so-called 'son' is perfectly okay with his mom being a slut, betraying his father, and farming her out to be fucked by his not so friend-like associate? Cucks, sons that act like cucks, gutter skanks and miserable shits that take advantage of a friend's drunken mother? Absolutely NOTHING to like here.

Holy shite you need to carry this story on it’s got tonnes of potential and we all know you’ve got the talent to do it justice this story is fantastic thank you so much for putting in the effort to entertain everyone who’s read this and enjoyed the hell out of it.

Cuck bullshit. I expected better from this author. 1*

love it, need a to continue

5 stars. Love a good story. Great smashing too. Keep going. Need to know if young man gets step sis loving. Nice work.

The losers who rate lower are lower.

Perfect fantasy.

Okay. That story was starting to bother me a little bit. I was just starting to feel like Alex was doing too much - I was guessing she'd wake up hurting everywhere, but all alone in bed. Holy shit! That got so fucking hot. Wow!

Nah! Just doesn't do it for me.Teenage wank fantasy/rape.

I would have loved to do this to Rosemary, my mom.

Another 5 star story.

Bill S.

Alex raped her, and she was okay with that in the end? The shit with Jerry was fucking weird too.

That was incredible, I had a picture in my head of her body, was jealous of so much love at the end. If only one could find such happiness in real life.

Rape stories should be in Non-Consent. Lead character should be institutionalized - he's sociopathic.

I can't get over this story. For as much as I get creeped out, I get turned on after Jill is awake the following morning. The author wrote a very interesting story and I didn't fully grasp some things until I read it for the 2nd and 3rd time.

Jill wanted this to happen - that's my belief. She didn't necessarily want it to go down the way it did, but she pretty much admits that for the first time, she went to bed completely naked on one of her "unwinding nights". By that point, it's clear as day that Alex is infatuated with her and obviously, she is enjoying that fact.

She went from being 14 years old to being a mother - a role she took seriously and jumped into head first. She wasn't a teen mom whose parents actually raise the baby so mommy can have a "normal" teen/young adult life. Clearly, she is a beauty who for one reason or another ended up on her third marriage to a man of means. Unfortunately, it also meant she was stuck at home with 5 or 6 kids while the husband traveled the world on business and his fooling around behind Jill's back is implied by Alex but never denied by Jill. She either believes it to be true or KNOWS it to be true.

In the early pages, it's clear to me that Jill greatly enjoys the attention from Alex...she's sexually attracted to him and is turned on knowing Alex gets an erection from just looking at her. Add in the unfulfilled life - a life her stepdaughter Danielle is currently enjoying...Jill is probably a bit jealous, but she knows Alex is so hot for her. The problem is, she can't make the first move. Alex realizes this. She wants him, but if he waits for her to make a move it's never going to happen. Alex comes over to work out with her every freakin' day. She knows Alex is going to want to check on her - hence the naked sleeping.

Let me be clear...The way things went down was fucked up BIG TIME. If Alex hadn't fucked her for hours and hours, leaving her incredibly sore, she would have loved it. She'd know he walked through the metaphorical door she left open for him (waiting for him naked). The author even throws in moans and smiles from Jill during some of the sexual activity. Personally, I still find it fucked up and WAY OVERBOARD. It probably should be classified as rape...well, then why didn't Jill call the police? How did she go from calling him a rapist to stroking his cock and eventually begging Alex to make love to her again now that she's clear-headed?

The story ends with the knowledge this is just the beginning of Alex & Jill's love affair. Jill says, "We need to get him a girl. Poor thing. Danielle maybe?" WE. Jill also says "Jerry, I think it's time WE got you working out too. If you want to have a chance with Danielle, WE'RE going to have to clean up your act." Mom and Alex are going to get Jerry buff and hopefully, Danielle will become attracted to him. Remember, Jerry and Danielle are only half-siblings.

That's all I've got for now. Great job, author...

Good job, thanks for sharing your work!

EXCELLENT, another🌟🌟🌟🌟🌟.

A horrible rape storey. ⭐️

As one who has no problem with mutually consensual incest in real life nor any other type sex between consenting human beings, I simply can not accept rape, either in fiction nor real life. No matter the outcome, Alex has no respect for himself Jill. Although this is fiction, I like plots and characters that are logically, and somewhat realistically, developed. The outcome/reaction of the characters in this story could not occur in any universe or dimension. Maybe the rape turned me off on this story.

Fantasy story. Midsummer's night dream.

Unbelievable.

how about jerry and danni next ???

The person who posted: I like plots and characters that are logically, and somewhat realistically, developed. The outcome/reaction of the characters in this story could not occur in any universe or dimension.

I couldn’t have said it better myself. Characters who have zero relatability and don’t resemble true human beings. I can’t think of any other writer here who continually writes stories as though they were told from the point of view of a sociopath. You think that’s too harsh? I’ve read the entire bunch of stories minus one shorter one and believe me, I’m being generous. Trust me and don’t waste your time with these overly long and pointless stories. This writer is way too comfortable with the mistreatment of women by disgusting men. Rape is fine in his universe. This writer has posted some of the most awful stories I’ve ever read here chock full of horrible people. There are better things to be done with your free time unless you enjoy wallowing in human garbage.

The only thing I took away from this tome was the realization that Alex was as fucked up as a soup sandwich. "I love you", "I love you", "I love you". What a load of sniveling shit !

Anyone who actually did this to a woman, deserves to spend several years in prison being sodomised by a very large man with a VERY large cock.

you are by far , One sick fuck, but a pretty good story teller as well

This is nothing but pure rape and this boy needs to be behind bars. The writer too realised this after the euphoria of the rape was done and dusted. And he realised that this would not be accepted by the general public. So he awakens Jill, and instead of her being absolutely furious, makes her into a bimbo with a young cock fetish. I suppose the writer that justifies the rape. And the most pathetically disgusting is involving the reluctant son into the act. Still it's just a fantasy, though a fucked up one.

L0VED IT!!!

Didn't care for him using her while out or son getting involved but, a dream cum true. Lucky young man! Love to see "next" story.