5thRing

I love getting comments on my stories. I like honest CONSTRUCTIVE critiques: what SPECIFICALLY you liked and disliked.

I'm seeking ways to improve because even I am not satisfied with my own work. Simply saying that you didn't like it is not helpful, at all.

I have just submitted a 3-part story that I wrote in an experimental style, and I'm very curious about what people think about the style.

The story is Does She Not Know: Angle (1-3)

I'm very curious how well it will be comprehended by readers who are going in blind.

Also featured are 2 other non-erotic works from some years ago.

LoliDagger, an original character for a comic book idea. A demon girl. Can't say too much without spoiling surprises, but it's got action and some fun.

Woman of Spiders. Another OC, comic idea, but written in an experimentally minimalist way, in 24 tweet-sized chapters.

I wish "lean" was an option for weight. I'm not skinny, but statistically speaking, I'm not sure I qualify as average. I'm 5'7", about 145 lbs, and not chubby. Is that average?