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Click herecut out wit. cut out conversation. cut out confidence and cut out assuredness. cut out a pleasant disposition. cut out empathy. cut out feeling.
cut out effort. cut out acceptance. cut out a mold. cut out conformity. cut out compromise. cut out hollow friendships. cut out identity.
i'm afraid of losing who i am.
PASTE.
I like the original idea you had. I mean, I could imagine you saying: hey, let's take the 'cut and paste' concepts and use them in a poem! Plus I like the staccato rhythm of the poem. Yes, there are ‘buts’ but hopefully you will accept them as constructive suggestions. <P>
In the selection process, you were in my opinion a bit too relaxed and allowed in things you should have left out and perhaps left out things you might have wanted to include had
you given your initial idea more 'peculating time'. For example: cutting (or reshaping)'mold'; 'conformity' and
'hollow friendships', sound like very good steps in the direction of forming more solid identity rather than loosing one. <P>
As far as your basic use of the main metaphor, is it totally abstract or is it a metonymy which in this case would mean that some parts of this metaphor bear physical relevance for you? Namely, has your life become somewhat immersed with sitting in front of the computer and communicating through it to the world?
If this is the case you could have done more to hint on it in what was left out of the poem.