All Comments on 'My Love For You'

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My Erotic TaleMy Erotic Taleover 19 years ago
that's right~

Your poem was shining bright

took me on a mental flight

sittin by the computer light

reading poems before night night

I just thought you might

want to know, your poem I liked~

sacksackover 19 years ago
Sounded a bit contrived.....

Like you were trying too hard to get the words to rhyme. The structure restricts you to a small pool of rhyming words, which is what gives the poem a less spontaneous quality.

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