by matriarch
Mat this is a beautiful poem - the content, structure, everything! Touched all the right places for me!
Sorry I'm just getting to this one, Mat. You know how I feel about the realization of self. Strong stuff. XOXOXOX
with some good phrasing and a nice pace to it. I like the line "touches that arouse yet relax", a nice description of those gentle caresses that can achieve both. I also liked the gender ambiguity of...
"Your soft, sinking flesh
a perfect match
for my hard, rising desire,"
...with it's obvious meaning to a man and yet still applicable to a woman, it helps keep the audience open. Lovely, babe.
Beautfully written. The word spacing makes it impossible NOT to jump from one word to the next. Am now going to look at some of your other work.
I love the way all the adjectives seem to jostle against each other: hard, calm, peaceful, etc.
Kool with a capital K!
I love everything you write.
Maybe I'm biased... but I love it. :)
Awesome darling, simply awesome.
xoxoxoxoxoxoxoox.
Keep going. :)
to connect. a huge sappy smile from me to you. as others have said...'awesome job' and i do so hope you continue on.