All Comments on '19th Birthday'

Great start for a first story. You should get someone to edit your work .Hope you do more with this a second chapter would be a plus. Thanks for the story . Keep writing and I'll keep reading .Good Luck

from nonsensical premiss to conclusion

I liked the setup, the tempo and the 'forced' aspect of it. It didn't drag on and on like some. The ending lets it be a stand alone or allows for a follow on.

Funny how the anonymous critics are always the harshest...

Looking forward to seeing more of your work!

Excellent story. In the beginning they were resistant but in the end they wanted more!!!!!!!

Rape!

Violence and rape! Get this shit outa here!

Let Grandma fuck you in the ass with her toothbrush. Feel her wrinkled tongue on your little puckeroo hole. Moan as she breaks Grandpas German dinner plates over your head and tears your cock off with her old woman hands.

Wish my sisters had been as accommodating. Well, one was,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,

Rape

That is as kind as I can be.

Should have been a bit longer because it seemed like her friend was facing a DP

You lost me the moment the girls got in the house away from their pursuers and brother turned on them just like that. Then the people pursuing them was just an afterthought after that. I quit reading halfway through since the whole scenario was "happy Birthday! Oh you're being chased? Come in so that I can screw you instead of letting some random stranger do it." *eyeroll*