by DeeLishus
This is not the first story of yours I've read but I wanted to read another to see if I felt the same before I commented. Both stories seem to be written along the same line. I like the way they start out but after that it seems like there's a big rush to get to the sex scene. The dialogues between the characters could be a little better and a little longer and the same goes for the sex scene. They barely get started and it's over.
--D.