All Comments on '21st Birthday Party'

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My version of your story includes, Paul getting you drunk so he can have the birthdaygirl. Not fucking in the car, but you on the couch and Paul in your girl and bed. More dancing and more free drinks and wondering what's taking place out on the dance floor. Anticipating is some times more powerful than the reality ? What ? Oh thinking about sharing your girl is a over used phrase here. I think you need to follow this up with Paul taking a Big place in your frustrated girlfriend. Consider it homework.

Keep writing, your ahead of me and my comments.

Your story is really good. Very detailed. However, I noticed plenty of grammar mistakes that downgraded the overall outcome of your story. I suggest you re-read your work before turning it in. Other than that it was a great, sexy story.

Huh? What language is this supposed to be?

fuck you dear annony

Love older man young wife. Keep writing. Maybe a chapter 2.

This is a GREAT story--has all the fantastic ingredients. Young, confident girl, dressing sexy ( stockings, heels, garter) and an older, confident man (MASSIVE IN SIZE!!) boyfriend, can't compete. Its a perfect pairing...MORE-MORE-MORE...and MUCH MOOOOOOOORE!!!! PLEEZZZZZE!

Nothing new about this story but well told and enjoyable. There is something about a big dick that gets everyone's attention and you certainly got mine. Worth a 5

IT is his own fault he got cuckolded, booze has a lot to answer for.

like to see a chapter 2

First paragraph she's your girlfriend. A little while later you say the fantasy of seeing your WIFE being fucked by older man. Which is she?

I agree the "have did" poor English usage made story less enjoyable. This story is a good start to four or five more chapters. They'll be uncomfortable ones as gf refuses to stop fucking him, his daughter finds out and is pissed, she goes off the pill and gets knocked up as he has become a houseboy in his own place. Old guy marries gf who says she still loves narrator to keep him tied to her. Husband starts fucking houseboy when she isn't around or is on her period. Humiliation to be assfucked in front of the woman you love by the guy who took her away from you.

Something finally breaks inside and he wants out, wants revenge but how??? What to do?

Something like that. Where is FTDS when we need him?

The older bull will be back and your girlfriend will be dropping her knickers again for him and it will not be long till he talks her off the pill and ducks your sexy woman pregnant

Your sexy young girlfriend will be getting plenty off his older fat Cock for a very long time these older men want to get younger girls like your girlfriend pregnant to them and I would say he's made a good start by fucking her bareback first time a few more fucks from his big Cock and some smooth talk and he will be talking your girlfriend off the pill then the real fucking will start

SICK

Thanks for this wonderful story but write more chapters please!

God no, quit while you’re behind!ffwxm8

my friend your story is definitely not real, just d'ont lie next time on the title .

how i know that ? so simple because your gf said to a totally stranger in a local wood : ( I have always wanted to be with an older experienced man, would you make my fantasy come true tonight ) this is the most fake senrence, no one in this world talks like that, just in your imagination .

just be honest next time good luck .

Gross

Great story,I pretended to be drunk and fall asleep at a party ,it was a party for her grandfathers friend who was turning 75yold,I was 26yold my girlfriend was 17yold,party finished just myself, girlfriend and her grandfather and the 75yold left,that's when I noticed that the old fuckers touching her, anyway she was shared by them in her first threesome

When my fiancee and I rented a basement apartment for 2 years when we were 21 saving for a down payment the owner upstairs was a man in his 50's. They flirted and he became the subject of our pillow talk. When I was all worked up I gave her permission to do whatever with him if the opportunity came along. I went away a month later with buddies for a weekend and came back to her admitting she was fucked silly the entire time and it was going to continue until we married. Size definitely matters in this case.

RUN FOREST.... RUN

The best thing about this story is that the author didn't add another story to this shit.