All Comments on '3 Families Vol. 01 Ch. 03'

pretty good story so far & it does need editing work. I'm not to sure you need any more characters, it's hard enuf to try to keep up with the ones already mentioned & trying to place them in the story. It gets a lil' confusing at times when a name comes out of left field.

Also the back & forth between years is sorta distracting too.

I look forward to the next chapter.

I think you are set up now time for the boy to nock them all up that's how us old players roll.

My older sister and I spent most of our time together naked growing up. We lived in a rather remote area and our parents were also naked some of the time. My sister and I started to explore each other early on and of course masturbated . First ourselves, and eventually each other. I would finger fuck her while she jacked me off and then we progressed to oral sex. We loved to sit and watch television and play with each other and then my sister decided to include some of her girlfriends which pleased me to no end. This didn't stop when we grew up and my sister, and her friends, still stop by to get naked,64F3 fondled, sucked and fucked

I do see what your doing there with changing the years often. It gives the reader a small peak of what happens further into the story but switches over to a diffent time period, and the reader has to follow along for a while to understand everything. With regular books and tv shows, they keep the viewers on a cliff at the end of each episode, but then fill them in right at the start of the next episode/chapter.

You're doing great. Some grammar errors, but you're. A hell of alot better then people writing these stories.

Are you almost finished with vol 2 ch 4 plz hurry you have New addicted

Please have mercy on your readers. All of the changes in the time line are making this story hard to follow.

its a really good story but im not a big fan of the mom stuff i just dont find it pleasing like the brother/sister stuff

Please, listen to the readers, who tells you to stop playing with the timeline - even a professional writers do not mess with that stuff if they can. And usually, they can.

Please stop with the time line. It's a good story but I get confused at times.

even fucking HOTTER

Yes, what the others are saying. Stop with the timeline.

I assume that your time frame style of writing is your favorite or most comfortable with. Most readers do not like to shift mental gears to follow this type/style of writing. I do not have statistics on the preceding statement; however, except for you, how many writers have you read that use this technique?

As far as the story goes, I like the character development. I like the initial development of subplots.

I read this series a few years ago, and it stick in my mind. A few months ago, I wanted to read it again, but for the life of me, couldn't remember the title. All I remembered were some of the character names. I went through the ENTIRE list of books in Literotica, trying to find this. Went through it twice. Finally, started going through the books one by one from the first, and I finally found it again. That's how much I lived your writing. 🤝

Unlike some of the other readers, I kinda like the timeline thing; it is a different way of writing, makes me pay attention, and I like to follow along this way.

AAANNNDDDDDD...it is not like it can be changed now...series already written and all that!! So, we just gotta live with it, now don't we??!!

Mom, sisters, cousin(s)...I love all of them, just the way the story is going now, and I am so looking forward to the rest of the series.

Thank You for such a grand read!!

Five**5**Stars!!