All Comments on '3rd Generation'

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xfeme4femexxfeme4femexabout 7 years ago
Great story.

Awesome story. A little hard to keep up with at times with the way it jumps around. But easily picks back up within a few lines. Loved it.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 7 years ago
More descriptions

If you put in more descriptive words about the women it would read better plus it would expand the world a bit more to give the reader an idea on what to put in their minds eye. All in all though it's a great concept

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