by SoftlyPressingOnward
Hopefully not too much time before a sequel. It was not too rushed and d3scribed enough to be erotic and not blunt
Hopefully not too much time before a sequel. It was not too rushed and d3scribed enough to be erotic and not blunt
I hate 2 and 3 parts of a story as I usually forget to see the "rest of the Story" in the future.!** My memory was not that good when I was younger and as I get older you know that it is a lot worse.! lol
Great Story so far { 5 } but will I remember to catch it later,?? Time will tell.^^
you fail the spelling test. Proofread or use an editor, please.
I care not a whit about the spelling or grammatical errors. I hardly notice them if the story is good. I care about the characters and the story. Love the quirky Kim, and identify way too much with Nate. Keep it up!
Steve
Lovely concept. Interesting protagonists. I want to see more.
Sight/site; peek/peak; wanton/wonton; hire/higher; homophones are common mistakes caught by editors. While some grammer and syntax goofs can be hilarious, often that isn't the mood you're going after. Make your words count.
Everybody has tests for the persons they are interested in becoming romantically involved with. Most don't come right out and say so and that's what sets this story apart from a lot of others with a similar theme. The characters are interesting and believable even though both have their faults. The added uncertainty of passing her tests is a good element for exposing his doubts and confusion and makes a reader want to see how things turn out.
The whole issue of grammar and spelling is a subjective judgement. Some people are far too picky about it but as long as it doesn't make the story confusing I'm inclined to be forgiving. As far as multiple part stories are concerned, I like them if the overall continuity can be sustained and the story warrants being continued. For God's sake, can't you use bookmarks or make an author a favorite so you can check in occasionally to see if another chapter has been added? Good job.