All Comments on '50 Shades of Asian Ch. 01'

by davidtoan

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AnonymousAnonymousalmost 7 years ago

Not enough erotic...

AnonymousAnonymousover 3 years ago
Exciting girl, topic... inconsistent syntax

This storyline has so much potential, but the inconsistent use of quotation marks for dialogue is distracting, Since you have an Asian girl, please describe the length and style and feel of her silky black hair, color and texture of her skin, her height, measurements, shoe size, voice, accent, mannerisms.

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