All Comments on 'A Beautiful Lunch'

Dump the over use of your mind crutches in favor of decent writing. This reference is to the construct of "word -- word" used in places just to allow author's mind to grasp the next part of the story.

One of the best I've read here in a long time - very natural, with all the personalities coming out, and the mechanics of a group clearly shown. I haven't the slightest idea what the idiot below me is talking about - you have the actual craft of word choice down pat; it's smooth, it's varied, it flows.

At last, something worth reading. Well done.

Good story, tempo and length. I like to think this was a real event! Wish I could have been there!