All Comments on 'A Beautiful Relationship'

It's not the worst story I've ever read and for a first story it's pretty good but it does have some problems. For one it moves by way too fast, there wasn't enough time to follow everything, let it all sink in, like at the end, why was the daughter leaving, it isn't explained very well.

Also you say the daughter got knocked up, and yet not once is there any mention of a kid, I would've thought that would be a pretty big character trait and yet nobody mentions it after it's brief glance over.

Sorry if this sounds overly critical, I'm just pointing out the flaws so you can avoid them next time. Take it as you will.

Good story. Great build up but needed more sex at the end. You need to stop her from going or follow her.

I hope to have another installment for everyone to enjoy after the first of the year. I'll try to address some of the other comments at that time, if I can fit them in.

Thanks to everyone who voted and commented. This was the first story I've shared publicly, so I hope to improve as I write more and learn from reader feedback.

I enjoyed it but the ending kind of seemed like it would be THE END. Maybe you could continue the story by having them sending pictures to each other and realizing that they have to get back together in a more permanent way.

I would love it if u kept writting. I love a happy ending an I think it would be great if d relationship developed and they could be together maybe even have kids! I really liked ur story!

I really liked it and would like to continue following their relationship. Does the father have another daughter with his second wife? (it would be hot if he seduces the young daughter and later on the three of them have sex together. Just a suggestion: the father doesn't need to be bisexual.

I hope they find a way of pursuing their relationship...

I would love to know do they get together again.

I do hope there is more to come.

Very nice relationship between dad and adult daughter, hope to some more.

I think that story is incredible! I would love to see more between these two

personally i cant' say i've took nude pictures of myself on my phone, for on my young daughter often use's it to call her friends when she's out of credit on hers and i wouldn't want her to see them, but i can understand other's doing it, the story seemed a little draw out but good