All Comments on 'A Boiled Frog Pt. 02'

Great story and character development

I really enjoyed the hell out of this story. It really hooked me and kept me page after page. Surprised it was as long as it is, happily though. Minor points of spellcheck replacing with the wrong word, but all in all a solid story with some heart.

I hope everything works out for the 3 of them cant wait for the next chapter :)

What a great story. Can't wait to read more.

He needs professional help. A truly sad story not worth the time spent to read it. It was neither sexy or entertaining.

Cant wait for him to become the girl of their dreams and all three ladies get together..perfect balance coming!

Initially, I was ambivalent (but curious) about the title. Your story hooked me in and it is fantastic. Thank you for publishing it.

Regarding your spiteful criticism to this story, I am certain that more of us found a deeper meaning in it.

If all you are looking for is jerk fodder, I suggest you search out the 1 page jerkfest stories. There are many of them to choose from.

Do not bash this author's work simply because you found it lacking in hardcore sex.

Author: please publish more adventures of Tina. I am curious to see how this progresses now that she is in love with 2 women who are equally in love with her.

Thank you.

This story is awesome. It's so great to read a story where there is some manipulation, but it's not malice filled. Do many of these turn out that the wife was just trying to turn the husband into a slave for abuse. I really hope this keeps up.

When I read the first chapter, I thought here we go again, another cockhold hysband. I agree with some of the other reviewers in that its great entertaining and good characters. Glad he wasn't a pussy and didn't let the men get the better of her/him. Keep going and I hope Julie really appreciates what she has and doesn't screw up. Looking forward to your next installment.

Santacruzman

I liked this chapter a lot. Not as much as the first one, but I still gave it a 5/5. My reasoning is that I feel like Chris made more progress towards Tina in chapter one, and that's what really gets me off in these stories: the progress of change. One thing I really liked was your attention to detail in this chapter, for instance, going through airport security. I'm anticipating to see where this story goes. Thank you for writing.

Thanks for a great read, , can't understand the negative fuckwits on here, if it is constructive critique then fine, but bullshit criticism or people being offended is just lazy and stupid, sorry, rant over. I enjoyed it immensely, got my girlfriend thinking too lol. Look forward to the next chapter

A great second chapter of this story. I can't wait to read more.

I love the character development and the storyline. damn near spit out my drink when I read the Jules question "whatcha doing girlfriend?"...so unexpected and well placed. More please!!!!!

Appreciate the feedback and kudos. Thank you.

As far as the comments:

He does need professional help. Don't we all?

I chose the title because I wanted a keyword that was easily remembered. So many of these stories are named variations of the same. You don't see the word frog too much in porn :)

And Machination, I agree its a progression story, but I thought he had to adjust mentally first to what's happened before I pushed him more out of his comfort zone. That's was my point with this chapter -- getting him comfortable in the real world. Maybe I didn't do it well enough. You will see more physical adjustments in the next part. Tina Adams! It's all about T and A!

i will eagerly await your next installment .my dream thank you so so much.

I truly enjoyed this chapter and look forward to more. I did some traveling last summer and had my girl stuff with me each time. The airport security thoroughly checked all of my luggage and didn't say a word about all my girl stuff. I just wish I had the courage to go through the airport dressed. I eagerly await your next installment, and the haters can eat a dick.

This was terrific. I loved everything about it. Please do continue!

your story flows from scene to scene seamlessly. keep up the stimulating work

Brimming with confidence, happiness, seamless flow, and GREAT SEX!!! Psychologically and physiiocally one of the bnest I've ever red here. Made me so wet!

xoxo,

Di

Excellent character development. A touch more attention to detail would be appreciated ( some references to Julie probably should be to Lisa instead ). Waiting, impatiently, for when you circle back to tie in the opening statements from part 1.

It's really good to read a sweet, loving, sexy, consensual story. I can't wait to see what happens next.

I love it, can't wait for more.

This story made me just read and yet it really affected me ... wouuu

Quite possibly the best story I've ever read on this site.

I've enjoyed both stories so far, its had me really thinking about which side of the fence I am with the womanly me. Keep the story coming!

This is the first time I've ever left a comment on a story but I couldn't not after spending much of the day reading this absolute masterpiece. As a TG constantly in conflict with myself this really spoke to me, I felt for Tina/Chris so much, the way she brings out his confidence and everything just pulled at my heart so. You have serious talent here and this is a fantastic start to a hell of a novel that would grab the attention and love of so many men, women and trans alike.

If you need support perhaps maybe a donation sceam could be set up?

Much love and respect, looking forward to what you have in store for us next.

Abi

Xxx

I liked it ;p

That's all.

Have a nice day <3

The story was absolutely amazing! I loved both the stories and can't wait for more.

I think there was 1 (only) error in the story. In the part where they play tennis, you might have accidentally typed Julie where I think you meant Lisa.

Noobdude, I think you might be getting your panties a bit wadded. The style and content you have been providing is excellent! That is what almost all of us wish for you to continue with. In many ways we are all just overgrown children, wanting someone to read us a story. Tell us your story, please!

can you please write the next episode. I've been waiting impatiently. Please!!!

Wow! I enjoyed your story. Kept me on edge so far. Thanks

more chapters 5 stars

Please continue with this story! I am really looking forward to seeing what will go

on with Tina,Julie, and Lisa!

This was a lot of fun!

I sure hope you going to write a lot more to this story I can't wait to hear what happens when he/she get home to her wife and see if they all live together or what

I am sorry I am such a slow writer. I had Pt. 01 and 02 done before I submitted the first. I am plugging away on Pt. 3 and just hit 16k words -- it's completely outlined, I just need to flush out some scenes. Thanks for your patience.

After the first paragraph of the first chapter, I'm soooo looking forward to seeing how she got there, and where they go. Great story!

Ok, I've read the comments, so please take my critique in the positive spirit it is intended.

This is a great follow up to chapter one. An easy decision to 5 stars. Now for the hard part:

First, please watch your J's and L's. More than once you inserted a Julie where a Lisa should go. It's an easy mistake to fix. My suggestion is to give the story a few hours or even a few days rest when you are done, and then read it to yourself. Verbally, if you can. It'll help bring out any continuity issues.

Second... Realistically, a very rare girl can play baseball, fix cars, play drums, and sing while being a boy magnet. And boys willingly kissing boys? I've seen them more willing to get kicked in the nuts. This stretched it for me a little too much.

Thirdly, I looked up these prosthetics, and while they may make one passable under clothing, exposed is a little much. I might have used a different device, like standing stranded on the freeway, wearing that light sundress mentioned, and the traffic blasting by creating a wind gust that billows Tina's skirt pretty high, but doesn't give away the ballgame. Some say that is a trite use, but it is far more realistic and accurate. Been there in real life. Maybe let a passing car give a tooted horn in recognition, and follow with genuine feminine embarrassment?

Lastly, things were a little inconsistently paced. It started out great, and matched the first chapter beautifully. Them things started to go in a blur, and you lost some of the details of earlier. It made comprehension a little harder.

Still, a great effort. I hope chapter 3 is similarly received!

First of all, thank you for taking the time and effort to write and submit this story. I gave it 5 stars.

I only have a couple of things I'd like to give feedback on. Anyone who has ever looked into male to female transitions knows that one of the easiest ways to tell guys from girls is that guys have an adam's apple. This aspect not being addressed or mentioned was the biggest strain on my "suspension of disbelief" for the story. A simple choker or something would have been nice. Or even a quick mention in Part 1 about him being one of those rare guys who doesn't have a noticeable adam's apple would have sufficed.

The second thing that slightly bothered me was the sudden disappearance of all of his facial hair. He said in the story that his wife must have been busy with her laser removal tool without his knowledge. Well, that's kind of impossible IRL. Frankly, I would have preferred it if his wife had secretly been giving him hormone replacement therapy.

I also didn't understand why he would get this suction machine, be told he had to use it 30 minutes every day, then go away for the weekend with glue-on boobs. If you plan on him getting breast implants, getting the machine and instructions should have waited for part 3, IMO (a very small thing I only mention because it seemed out of place in the story).

I do hope that this story ends with him getting HRT and breast implants (while keeping his cock), and becoming Tina full-time. If you do decide to go this route, here is a "quick reference" image that lists the effects and how long it takes:

http://i.imgur.com/OBjQy5Z.jpg

Keep up the good work!

Great comments and feedback, thanks

Anonymous: You made me go back and reread Pt. 01 because of the Adam's Apple comment. I guess my coverage of that got cut somehow. I thought I had covered it. And you are right, I got sloppy with the facial hair. When I wrote this originally I had it all in one big file - all combined but it was huge and I was told by one person who read it and gave me feedback, to break it down cause no one reads 15+ page stories on literotica. I should have moved the suction cup stuff to Pt. 03 because that part covers breast enhancement.

And satinlvr_mwf: I am a noob and make mistakes. The pacing was my fault as I rushed the ending of Pt. 02 because people were clamoring for the next part, I had started to write out the wedding scene but cut it completely to get it posted quicker. A mistake I regret. That's why there has been such a delay for Pt. 03. I hope I didn't do it as much in Pt. 03 although I did catch myself in the end skimming over things to get done. It's a habit I need to break.

And the good news -- Pt. 03 is done and has been sent to an editor for review. Hopefully, if I don't have to rewrite too much, you should see it here soon. I apologize in advance for its length, it is the longest part so far.

Though I know you typed this long before I gave you feedback on the last piece, you organically arrived at many of the things I suggested. The scene with him and Lisa having PIV sex is a perfect written example of what I meant by a long take. It was an excellent, excellent passage.

The love triangle sub plot is heating up, especially with Jules watching them. I really enjoy a cuckquean scenario where the wife is who set up the other woman and then gets off on it. Hoping for threesome not because the kink, but because this is evolving into a very adorable poly relationship. Having Lisa and Jules reconnect in this context would be very emotionally fulfilling because there is hardly ever a love triangle that actually connects on all sides.

It does seem like there is more the Jules than meets the eye. The narrative up until now made it seem like she was submissive to Lisa, but I am fairly sure that is not the case. Which, building on my last feedback, makes me wonder just how long she and Lisa had been working out the details for this weekend. I really need a moment where Chris/Tina realizes just how much of this has been orchestrated by Jules. Hoping her intent was always for them to be a triad and not to subjugate Chris into oblivion so she could get back with Lisa guilt free.

Which brings me to Lisa's developing characterization. I LOVE IT (for the most part). I really enjoyed seeing her personality unfold as she and Chris/Tina bonded. I do wish there was a little more of her outside of the context of ger and Tina's escalating sexual attraction. Like, she learns a lot about Chris/Tina and gets to know them as a person. On thenothet hand Chris/Tina's take away from the weekend is very physically focused. There is a lot to be said of them gaining confidence rapidly in those physical exchanges, but at the end of it it does not feel like there was a lot of depth discovered from their side.

I do have a problem with the narrative implying Lisa is a lesbian simply because she turned to women after swearing off men. Which sets up the trope of the right guy can fuck a lesbian straight which you took great pains to reject in the course of the story, but eagerly jumped into with Lisa and Tina as she seemed to go into free fall for the D.

Except Lisa is not a lesbian, Lisa is Bi. From the moment she takes an interest in Chris/Tina, it is obvious she is unhappy with, but not repulsed by his penis. As someone who is bisexual, I am happy to see that. I really hope that you continue to write her as an exploring bi woman and do not make her motivation going forward be turning Tina into a "real woman" to deal with not being able to reconcile having the hots for someone with a dick.

I got a little wortied in the middle when it seemed like you were setting up a scenario where Lisa was trying to drop Ash in Chris/Tina's lap and I am glad you avoided that. I would have liked to see Julie dropping them off at the airport, but the character beat of them becoming Tina automatically sort of makes up for what I feel is a critical lack of positive conversation. I get why you made the narrative decisions you did, but the vacuum of conversation between parts one and two bothered me a little.

So overall great, small issues with Julie's name being in places it should not be. Hoping part three lives up to what you seem to be setting up.

Although you need to proofread your story, because it says Julie instead of Lisa in many places, and that is very distracting, the story was so well created and written it is easy to overlook those few mistakes. I love the story and it has improved dramatically with the addition of Lisa and Ashley is also a great character.There is complete setup for a continued long term (10-15 episodes) series here. The character development is great and the story has a good continuiity. Easily one of the hottest, belivable stories I have read here. Keep up the good work, but please proofread it so the names dont wreck the flow as one reads.

EXCELLENT!! AAAA+++

I have been reading erotica for forty years and this has to be the best story I have ever read, it was truly amazing and so very well written!

Tina is my fantasy. Loved it especially since my guy was at attention constantly

This was an absolutely great story! I loved every word of it! Julie and Lisa worked out all the details for Tina to be herself! I think Chris is a figment of imagination now as Tina has stepped forward to be a sexy, confident woman! This story even helped Lisa realize what a good man Chris can be allowing him to take control where she needed to understand the give and take of a relationship! I sure wished I could become a Tina with women such as a Julie and Lisa to encourage my journey becoming a woman!

You turn him into a spineless caricature. Just because this is fiction doesn't mean that reality gets thrown out with the bathwater. And this was just ridiculous. I won't read anymore because you're going so one-sided and he's no longer a man. Glad to see you stopped writing because you can't.

Do not listen to the people who don't get it. Spineless? No longer a man? Hogwash. I will continue to read what you write.

Story was great a little long but tbats ok good read

Wonderful read, gets really hot. Liked character development of Tina and melting of the ice queen. Please keep up with the good work. Don't listen to naysayers. I'm straight but got really turned on by your writing. Thanks.

As a genderfluid/ genderqueer/ two spirit/ somewhat crossdresser/ somewhat transgender person, this story is REALLY pushing some buttons in a good way.

Wait, you deleted your wife's contact from your phone!? And did it just because some nasty bitch sneered at you?

You're trying to sell some level of realism in your story, well, you shit all over that, didn't you? What real human being on this planet throws away their spouse's contact info? Did this moron really delete his message history as well? Does he genuinely have zero active thought processes? For that idiocy, this chapter now has a max rating of 3*'s.

Then his wife abandons him, leaves him without a whisper of regret. He also has zero help from her to take care of all of these details - all of which have one purpose: to get Julie promoted. Oh, sure, Julie framed it as having to do with Lisa, but realistically, Lisa has no hold over Julie that the woman doesn't willingly give to her mistress/girlfriend/whatever. The simple fact is that Julie lied to Chris about breaking off her relationship with Lisa. The day he arrived she had been eating Lisa's cunt and later said that she had broken things off when Tina showed up - which was days before then. Where do you suppose Julie spent the night that Chris stayed up worried about her? Between Lisa's legs, I guaranfuckingtee you.

If they (Chris & Julie) crash and burn, they deserve every scorching moment of agonizing heartbreak. If they survive? Well, it's a story, anything can happen, regardless of if it makes any sense.

Yeah, I got halfway through page 1 and came here to start my rant, that's how shitty this chapter started. Now I'm returning to watch Lisa stomp all over him like the slug she sees him as.

I. Do. NOT. Like. This!

Didn't get another 1/4 of the page before I face-palmed.

How can he not question every time Lisa says "Jules and I talked and she said xyz"? She's almost got to be lying half the time and making shit up the other half!

Just for grins I checked the last chapter... this series is unfinished. Shite!

Well, I'll leave this appropriately rated and just leave my last thoughts.

The story has immense potential... in some ways. In a few short pages you've introduced a relatable character, you've established a potentially decent relationship (Chris & Julie), brought crossdressing into play with very smooth moves, and begun to establish Chris's comfort with Tina.

You also introduced a villain, leading to an antagonist (sub?)plot that has a lot of potential.

I'm interested and damned disappointed that what started so promising and seems to have weathered a genuinely shitty opening to chapter 2 is, in fact, one of the endless number of abandoned stories online.

The fact that it is amazingly high scored just makes it all the more disappointing as obviously many other readers were sucked into the story and loved it.

I'm writing as Anonymous only because that is the only choice being a non-member. And it was only a fluke that I came across your material (no pun intended) whilst searching for something else; but I was CAPTIVATED by your writing. And that's no small feat. I have been writing for over 50 years, and I don't write erotic material...and I wouldn't have selected "a boiled frog" for reading material; but I came across it and now the better off for reading this Chapter. Tho I peeked ahead and the content in the next chapter doesn't resonate with me (so i won't go further), your storytelling ability is amazing. You have a talent and regardless of where you go with it, I hope you don't let naysayers dissuade you from developing your craft. You seem to accept criticism from a positive standpoint; may you continue to use that to your advantage in developing your talent.

Fabulous really fabulous. Again Tina is adorable. Very interesting story line that flow smoothly.

Veronica

Exactly what Veronica https://www.literotica.com/stories/memberpage.php?uid=6388307 says 🙏

Oh God, I wish I was Tina, what a terrific story. “Just love your stories,keep them cuming,oops coming.

Love your writing. I did find I took issues with deletion of the wife's contact info and her ghosting him. Otherwise, brilliant writing. Looking forward to reading more from you.

Boil her ass with a divorce.

I'm so glad Tina got to fuck Lisa. Usually crossdressing stories go straight for the sissy chastity stuff, but I always thought that was a waste. What's the point of being a man presenting as a pretty woman if you don't get to fuck around a bit and turn a few lesbians? The relationship with Ash was very sweet. I'm really glad Tina was able to mellow out Lisa and form a positive relationship with her. And the bit where Tina was perving on everyone in the changing room was a nice touch.

I can't wait to see Tina's confidence grow even more in the next part.

Very erotic story- very well written and great character and plot development

Mostly well done, but you need to keep the characters straight. Several times you refer to Julie when it’s obviously Lisa. It breaks the flow of the story.