All Comments on 'A Box, a Woman and Time Ch. 01'

Very well written - literate. I enjoyed it and actually felt his pain at the end, lol. Looking forward to more.

Your have painted a well written and colorful picture which leaves the reader anticipating more. Bring it on.

don't plan on leaving us there...please..more...

Please, no more. 2nd person, present tense - ugh.

exactly the right touch for a story of this type. You clearly worked hard on it, and that work was well worth it.

Well written especially the trailing end.. I wonder how it continues, do take your time and write even a better follow up

Very different from other entries and stands out in that respect. Excellently conceived sex scene, the ending was a bit abrupt.

I wish I could write without the occasional typo creeping past the inspectorate. You seem to have achieved it. Well done. Liked the story too.

This might have been interesting, but I couldn't get past the second person perspective to get into the story.

You write you this and you that. That is terrible writing. Sorry but that's not just my opinion but others as well.

Why do so many writers insist on telling me what I think feel and do?

You dont know me nor do you control my actions. Write in the third person and tell a damned story.

...looking for some good old righteous third-person action, and there he is again: the terrible second-person offender - making your dick shrink with his post-modern gimmicks.