All Comments on 'A Boy Grows Up'

Nicely done. I can't wait to read more.

Interesting premise...... I would like to read more.

Sentence structure was extremely awkward. Punctuation was spotty and in some cases missing altogether. I didn't buy the idea of an 18-year-old accepting being "grounded" for what a 16-year-old sister had done.

In all, pretty lame.

Hello - What a hot story ! It certainly made me hard and remember when I saw a real woman for the first time.....Maybe Mary will show him how to screw her tits or do it doggy style ?? Please write the next chapter soon......thank you !!

The writing is unique.. not perfect but in a style and humor that is endearing. Were the mistakes deliberate? Probably not, but they help make for a very pleasant and erotic story. Thanks!

This sounds like a true story. It's dated, of course, and most young readers won't get the nostolgia. I like it. On the down side; it's a little wordsy. On the up side; it's clear.

Ooooh Nice! Good Language, interesting suspense, entertaining, and of course, erotic.

that was really hot i can't wait for more

I happened across this submission, found myself reading it, and I have to say, it was very enjoyable. I don't understand the negative comments, I look forward to the next chapter!

This could have been in more detail, but a good job

nevertheless.

Too bad for some language errors, but the build-up was very nice. Great story man thanks!

the story was nice, but for god sakes, learn how to punctuate. learn how to use periods and comas the right way, you made me sick with your blatant mistakes.

Somebody writes: "learn how to use periods and comas the right way, you made me sick with your blatant mistakes."

Were you in a comma when you wrote this?

Do unto others, Dude.

Hi there,

Wish you lived in Worcester, Mass they had triple deckers, Geeeeze you lucked out dude, hell of a way to be punished for spying or peeping on your neighbor.

Anyways I want to say I really like the story.

what's best about it is that I can believe it really happened...

did it? lol