All Comments on 'A Close Family'

Keep going!

Don't stop now!!!

Keep it going,

Please give it a lot of thought about continuing the story, it definately needs continuation-in other words write more

good story bro, keep up the good work. can't wait for more.

Thank you for a fun story.

While the story itself was pretty fucking hot, I have to admit that the typos kept jumping out at me. Some tips:

"There" is a place; "their" is in reference to something that more than one person possesses; "they're" is a contraction of the words "they are."

"Your" is a possessive; "you're" is a contraction of "you are."

Adding an apostrophe and "s" to a noun like "sister" infers ownership. Like so: "The dildo was my sister's."

The plural form of a word does not need an apostrophe. So when speaking of more than one sister, it should be "sisters" not "sister's."

I'd suggest that you either find yourself an editor/beta-reader before posting stories or going over your work with a fine-toothed comb. Spellcheck is your friend. Believe me when I say that your audience will appreciate it greatly and that your story will be that much more enjoyable when people don't have to stop and ponder what it was you MEANT to say.

Heel of a good start to a good series. Need a little grammar work to make it better, but all in all, a damn good start. Can't wait to see what happens next.

Continue please...what a pussy banquet Mike's going to have

Great story, Keep the storieline flowing...

Wonders what happens now... so keep writing ;)

Keep writing.This is one of the best stories i've read in a long time.

That was an awesome start for a story and a well thought out plot and I thought the sisters' seduction was nice, drawing it out for 3 pages and 4th page of fun keep up the good work continue with Lee I'd like to know the rest of the story.

Even if a theme is good and imaginative, it is always distracting to see such elementary grammatic errors such as using apostrophes for plural words instead of possessive, using "there" in place of the pronoun "their", etc. It can ruin an otherwise potentially good tale.

Liked most of the story; I don't care for anal and not that much of a fan of domination, but it was still very good. I have to echo the other comments about the grammar; it needed an editor to clean it up, but the story idea was very good.

total shit what is this the twilight zone no guy would put up with the teasing he would find a way to move out so he could be free of the teasing any body that is old enough to be on this site is looking for stories that atleast sound realistic yours is total bullshit put it in the sci-fi or fantasy section

Good though I hope you do a sequel with Lee being a virgin who's been in love with her brother since she hit puberty and always watched him on his drunken nights wander naked to the bathroom.

GREAT Story.. I LOVED it!! Please continue.

Great story. You just have to finish it.

08/28/2008

Anxiously awaiting the final story of fucking sisters and brother.

Although I do not usually get in to the idea of a brother being with his sister, or sisters, I think the basic structure of your story is solid. You really did right by expressing the way the brother had reservations about crossing these sexual lines with his sisters, I think that is more true to life than some other fantasy would be. We are all programmed to behave with certain boundaries and learn embarrassment with regards to sexuality, for the most part. However, I think that because humans CAN be with anybody they choose, it is pretty much inevitable that they WILL be with anybody they choose, sooner or later! - - A person has to ask, what comes first in a relationship, complete trust or complete love? I think many people fall in love and then develop a life-long trust of their lover (and a trust in the confidence and confidentiality that relationship brings). However, with family members the trust exists from the very beginning and the love is "automatic" (for lack of a better word). So who is someone more likely to be relaxed and sexual with? A complete stranger they have feelings of love for, or a family member who would do anything for them?

I am not encouraging family members to be sexual with each other, because that is complicated and crosses so many of these boundaries that have been dictated by society! There must be more respect for the trust that exists between family members and I believe only consenting adults are responsible enough to behave respectfully with each other. Anyone that does not first care about the feelings and attitudes of the other person, is not being responsible and mature in their life.

If you keep writing and exploring the human condition, perhaps you will encourage people to think about ideas from angles they never imagined on their own.

It was a great story. In some parts is just really funny, hilarious made me want to throw myself in the ground and laugh out loud. Continue writing because that was great!!!

It gave me a great late night pleasure. It just kept going and going. Can't wait for part 2!

saving Chapt 2 for tomorrow...but it was believable, funny, sexy and a whole heck of a lot of fun.

I figured on the British setting without reading your notes, however at some point it would be nice to clean up the few spelling errors... just a minor note... there for their .. and stuff like that. Is just disconcerting.

Am looking forward to exploring all your other writings. Thank you.

Loved this story. Great job.

enjoy this chapter, hope ch 2 is good or better.

why you were very slow and too much details without reason. I got bored and almost left it without finshing it. try to edit it so it may become good

Five stars, my friend, means I like it.

Well worth 1* , and I mean it!

Is this set in Canada or England? Because the style sems English but some of the wording seems to hint Canadian.

good story. Enjoyed the emotion and conflict, both internaly, and sibling conflict.

And i was wondering where this was set as well. Some phrases in there that i wasnt framiliar with.

The whole setting seems...off.; they live like moneyed people, but talk and behave like coal-miners, and the writing hints at someone who wants to be wealthy but is writing from the depths of a third-grade education, someone who doesn't really know how the English middle-class live or speak; it's not like this, that's for certain. You should write about what you know, not what you guess, and the story suffers, the jarring dialogue, the lumbering attempts at building tension between the siblings, none of it works, sorry.

Lighten up number one it is just a story not the bible it is supposed to be fun not a chore.Good job I say.

You do have a thing with apostrophes, don't you? Putting them where there is a plural and 'here goe's',

That was great how you get the brothers total feelings toward his sisters and at the end went wild on them both. . I'm hard and going.to find some ass now . can't.wait to read more from you.

What a ripper of a story Mike being embarrassed, ashamed and confused until the girls convinced him it was OK. Then what a fuck-feast and then sprung by the little sister who is going to join the fun I'm sure!!!!!!!!

Great work Mikro!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

HOWEVER I STILL DON'T UNDERSTAND WHY THE AUTHORS USE THE (....)?

I SPENT A GOOD 20 MINUTES EDITING THE WHOLE STORY SO I COULD LOAD IT INTO TEXTALOUD WITH JENNIFER'S SEXY VOICE. IMAGINE YOU'RE LISTENING TO A GOOD STORY AND YOU HEAR JENNIFER SAY, 'dot dot dot dot'. IT KIND OF FUCKS UP THE VIBE AND FLOW! STILL A GOOD, SOLID 5 STAR STORY. I'D GIVE YOU 10 STARS IF POSSIBLE!

Great Story! I enjoyed the slow then accelerating pace but I would like to read a bit longer tease sequence.

Thank you!

This story is beautiful

Couldn't get through the first page. Another Bi story by a Bi author.