by WildFox666
What are you - a set of timber window coverings?
Maybe you "shuddered"...
This story line has a lot of potential, but should be expanded upon. I fell we got the thumbnail version, rather than the detailed story. Author should keep up the writing, I think she has potential.
A sex story should described slowly, the action may be faster. You described the whole gangbang in one paragraph? Is it a good one? I don't think so.
Everything happened so fast. It was all over in less than 20 minutes.... that includes the trip over to the beach. Not a favorite.