All Comments on 'A Day at the Beach'

I really enjoyed this. :)

Very enjoyable. I think there's more here than a couples day at the beach.

Really enjoyed this story. A fun and sexy read.

hope theirs more to follow!!!

good story, but u mixed names...rita and vella

That was fun!

I enjoyed this. Good build up. Kinda mysterious not knowing much of either. Of course I'm in complete agreement with the others more of these 2.

Rita or Vella?

My apologies. This story was originally inspired, several years ago, by a story from another author Vellams. It was written as a sort of sequel. That author is no longer on the site and I was unsure how she would feel about it being reposted with her character;s and user name, So I changed the Name to Rita, I had thought I replaced all instances of the original, but apparently I was mistaken. I missed one. I'm sorry.

Thanks. (I didn't pick up on the name changes)

What a wonderfully written story. I hope there is more to come of our private beach.

Many thanks to all for reading it and for letting me know how you felt about it. It was actually one of my first stories that I recently decided to repost. I like to think, I've gotten better since this one. ;)

Plot was ok, but I would love to own a pair of binoculars so powerful they can pick up nipples poking through a bikini from a distance - sadly, that rather spoiled the story, as I couldn't take it seriously after that.

First of all. what WAS the distance he was viewing from? Was it 1000 yards? or 50? I can see a perky nipple under a bikini from 40 yards WITHOUT binocs. With only a 4X pair I should be able to see them just as easily at 160 yards. Perhaps you are thinking that her breast needed to fill the entire view in order to spot the nipple. If so then you really don't know much about binoculars or you have REALLY poor eyesight.

I would take your post seriously but your ignorance ruined it for me.

This is well wrought. Your pacing is great and the action is hot when it comes. Awesome work.