All Comments on 'A Day in the Life'

An awesomely hot story. Thank you for sharing.

MistaBone

As much as I would like to say I didn't, I really did enjoy this story. The Alex character is annoying and in another chapter I'd love to see him humiliated, but the dynmanic of the two friends works well.

Not bad, there were only a few grammar errors; but it moved a bit too fast. We learn nothing about the main character. What does it mean that he is more settled? How did Alex happen to be in this class?; it would be a bit unusual if the instructor let anyone just walk in and watch. Maybe if you told the story from each of the characters' perspectives, you could fill in the details. Overall, it doesn't sound like a story written by a woman, although you did leave mercifully leave out the measurements and numbers.