by PSBurlesque
that was great but it ended too quickly. what happened the next day? does she tell her closest friend? is thier dom and sub in the cards?
very nice story id love to read more maybe other public or just some hot bbw fun
I went commando before. I was about 15 and had my first Brazilian wax, to please my bf. After a few days, the stubles came out and prikled when rubbed against my panties. It became so irritating and I walked with a sort of limp. My friends asked if I had sprained my ankle or something. I just had to take off my panties and it helped a bit. And My God, with a breeze constantly over my depilated pussy under my short denim skirt! I was worried sick about getting caught. Whenever I caught eye with strangers, I thought they must have found out about my secret!
Just love your story!
You have a good start and I would like to see more. Grammar and spell check nice, but I like the subject matter and look forward to getting more of it out of your head and onto the web.
Awesome story even with the few typos
More please. Just what is needed, some full and fine stories of adventurous late ladies.
PSBurlesque,
I loved the story. Also, I will happily check your submissions for typos in the future. I hope to see more from you soon.
Thank you for all the comments, I'm sorry for some of the blatant typos. I agree it is distracting; I'm always up for help with my writing though! As I reread it I'm seeing typos that I had edited prior, so it's the unedited upload. It's also my first time writing Erotica as well so all your critic is welcome. I'm glad some of you enjoyed it, I will be writing more.
You don't need an editor, what you need is a part two.
To Anon, if you want to help be her editor instead of her english teacher. Help her edit her work and don't complain about errors.
You need an editor. Too many typos and punctuation errors made it very distracting. Otherwise, the story was good...keep trying!