All Comments on 'A Debt to be Paid 02'

The idea and flow are good. Still some distracting typos and too bad he needs drugs to make this work.

Please git a volunteer editer. Typoes are keelling you. Great premise and descriptions.

"That was me making you feel good." Jeff kissed her cheek and trailed down to her breast, her nipples were still hard and she knew they were sensitive from her cumin."

Damn if only I had realised before today that cumin could do that to me. I've been missing out all this time. I'm going to go raid my spice rack right now. Can't wait to get off like a motherfucker! Woohoo!

You get five stars for being awesome. But yeah an editor would really be handy.

Thank you all for you comments for the next few parts I will get an editor to proof read my stuff. I'm glad everyone enjoys the story line more to come soon.

The story was lost amongst the countless and needless errors.

Rule number one, do not write using the autocorrect feature. Autocorrect guesses at what word you might have been trying to type and replaces that mistyped word with something spelled correctly but often not even close to being the right word. As such your autocorrect feature distorted this story far worse than a few misspelled words would have.

Rule number two, READ what you have written before you submit it to be published. Read each word slowly. Do not skim. This is how you can catch many of your own mistakes; which is what decent writers are supposed to do.

Nice read and story line. Can't wait to find out what else is in store. However, there are only two chapters and it has been a very, very long time since it was published. It is very annoying for authors to start a story and then not finish.

Get an editor. I was able to decipher many sentences where words were either missing or misspelled. Good premise, but like several other comments, the typos are a huge distraction.

You desperately need an editor URGENTLY ! Having said that again, because it needs repeating, are you ever going to finish this story?

What was the training ? Are you going to continue the story ? As it is it seems incomplete.