All Comments on 'A Deep and Meaningful Massage'

I found this awkward to read somehow. I thought the executive woman part was pushed too hard with too many details, and I didn't find the massage part realistic, as if the author hadn't actually had a massage before writing this. I do like massage stories, but there are a lot of them out there.

Thank you for sharing and I love massage stories but who are these people?

It's hard to care with no character development and not even a real physical description of the characters.

I did however really like your use of metaphor with the receptionist.

If you're going to write a massage scenario, at least know the difference between "masseuse" and "masseur" before you start.

I agree with the previous poster about the need for character development.

I just didn't believe in your main character. She is meant to be a high-powered executive, yet despite being married to a masseur, she thinks he's a massuese. That's not credible, and when characters in a story lack credibility they fail to engage our interest.

Despite this, I think you do have some potential, so please don't give up writing - I'm sure you will improve with practice.

Massaged by her own husband? Certainly an enjoyable experience for wife and hubby themselves. But for me as a reader it is too "politically correct". It lacks the "forbidden" factor which is for eroticism what the salt is for food.

...your story was so realistic, do write more ....many thanks !!

If you want your wrighting to have a better impact be sure to use the correct terms for your characters.A masseuse is a female practioner of the trade.