by Texienne
what an excellent, titillating, original story. great job building a rather odd scenario, making it really hot and sexy, and then creating a logical reason behind it.
I think you should try and work another Chapter for this one and think most of the readers would agree. Slow moving love - maybe even marriage or a very long relationship -- anything to keep it going to the next level. Just a thought.! Thanks. JAG/TSO
Fascinating storyline--believable enough, I think. Super hot, but please don't just leave it at that--it seems like only half the story has been told! Great job!
Mature style for someone so young. The plot is original and that's saying something around here. Keep writing, darlin'.
I en[joyed this story. The twist at the end totally surprised me. I thought the pole dance and masturbation scenes were particularly well executed as well. It looks like you submitted four stories in short order and then stopped. What a shame, but thanks for sharing "Discreet Distance" with us! [Gualterio]
This is what Lit. needs more of, more beautifully, artfully written fiction, not the same misogynistic drivel.
Lovely. I'd love to read an epilogue.
Until the point in the story where Ronni asked why he hadn’t raped her, I thought there was a pretty logical solution to his predicament. He should just tell her to either “put out or get out “. After the rape story, however, it was obvious she had some deep emotional problems. This was a well written story but it’s just not something I would consider “entertaining”.