All Comments on 'A Family Cruise Ch. 01'

1 page is not a chapter. "Family cruise". If you actually want people to read and enjoy your content you're going to have to actually give them content. Otherwise don't waste your time.

Not bad for a first attempt. I'm looking forward to seeing where this goes.

A fellow Ta'veren

great warm up! please cont.

on another note ignore the anonymous trolls, 99% are idiots and cowards to afraid to back their posts with their name or acct. there's no rule how long a chapt. has to be.

I liked the start but it was really a tease. Don't start a chapter and then end it before anything really good happens. A chapter should be two to three pages long at a minimum.

I liked it as a first page to a beginning chapter. To bad there wasn't a full chapter, So have to give it a 3 at this point.

Will his sister be birthday or a lesbian. I hope she & his sister screw her brother.

Can't wait for the next chapter.

Soon Alice will be here. EXCITING.

While this does smell like a classic wish fulfillment story where he's magically the only guy around several (no doubt bisexual) nymphos, I admit it has a nice flow and charm to it.

Just like at the end - I don't think she'd go around tasting random sperm, but I still liked the idea of her tasting her brother's sperm without knowing it. This might get interesting.

Great story make the next chapter longer? Awesome start

this is a hot story. love it. hopefully you'll have a few more chapters very soon!!!

great story, what's taking so long on chapt. 2

Was he too stupid to know that he left his load the window when he hid under the bed like a 5yr old

Dude love your name

C'mon man, in the end, you couldn't have told us she was licking his cum off the window or something hot like that?

Good start but additional chapters needed .

Base outline is set. We have a MILF mom , a sexy older sister , the story told from the point of view of a guy who just finished freshman year of college and Alice , who is supposed to be a sexy cousin of approximately the same age. This was titled A Family Cruise so let's get them on the cruise . Preferably a Caribbean cruise so they spend lots of time in swim suits and dressing up for dinner .

And please try for multi page chapters

It's 2022...we still only have 1 chapter. Thanks obama

I think after five years this is all we're going to get, what a shame!