All Comments on 'A Family that Plays Together'

it three stars in hopes that the next chapter will be better.

If there would have been some seduction on the part of the father or daughter and not went right to sucking and fucking it would have made for a better story, I did like mother helping the daughter lose her cherry to dad so no one was hurt or cheated on.

You're onto somthing. The ideas are good don't quit just add alittle more structure some of my Lit colleagues aren't off base with there constructive criticism. Ignore the hardcore hater everone started somewhere. I for one would like to see where this store goes. Does Marcie give him a daughter/sister? Does the 3 of them stay together? Like i said good ideas.

While I seldom comment on grammer, this was atrocious to the point of distraction from what appears to be a great beginning to a, hopefully, very good series. 5*

I came twice just reading this first part, looking forward to reading the 2nd part. Good job HankWilliams1956. I am a 1956 model also and also live in Oklahoma.

Can we get more parts to this story