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nightshadownightshadowalmost 6 years ago
Good work!

With the exception of lots of little typos, this was a great counterpoint to the first chapter. While you don't need my approval, I wholeheartedly approve!

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 6 years ago
Crap

Absolutely no dialogue. Not good. Try again

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