All Comments on 'A Favor Returned...'

You can't stop here, you have to continue this hot story. I really hope that you have a lot more stories for Amy and Laurel. Don't make us wait too long

Looking forward to the exploration. Great story; wonderful development; very erotic.

been waiting for more now you leave me waiting for still more...please continue laurel and amy's story. it would interesting if laurel was rewarded for hard work and given a trip for TWO that her husband couldn't attend for some reason.

Awesome writing and I love the build-up in the story. Please write more, I have to know what happens next, lol.

Hi, I loved your story, but I kept feeling confused. Who was it again, that had a family with the flu? And so on. I found out that the confusion started with the constantly shifting point of view. This wonderful story would be much tighter, if you could limit the shifts to, say, one POV per paragraph. Oh, and please make the shifts obvious.

I won't vote this time, because I can't give you top vote with this much room for improvement. But the story line is hot, and your characters are plausible and real. So, keep it up!

Please continue laurel and amy's story

Wow - just wow. That was amazing and so f'ing erotic. I thought it might be too long at first but you left me wanting more! Please PLEASE continue with these two characters. Thanks for such a great story!

You can't leave us hanging like that. You have to do another chapter. The first two are fantastic and fantastically well written. Kudos time ten at least. Thanks so much for sharing with us.

really enjoyed this and i am so ready for Part 3

Please please write more. I love the storyline and amy and laurel are so great. Need toe read more about their story.

But they are cheating on their husbands.

Wonder how they reconcile their affair and their marriages.

One thing: I hate it when, in a story, the characters refer to their genitalia as their sex. Maybe in the first story it worked with Amy being a bit naïve. But not in this one, especially during the hotel scene. It sounds like something a prude would say.

please, you have to continue. love love love these two characters. great story - and don't listen to the nit-picking, you are really good.

MORE!

I need more. this story is so good !!!!

Is it even a question to continue??? YESSSSS!!! OMG this is absolutely the most incredible story ever! Love that it's a follow-up so we get that much more invested into the characters. They have such great banter and overall chemistry. This just made my life. Loved the first one, am speechless about this one! GREAT WORK!!

Please keep writing about that happens next.

I've been reading Literotica since the earliest days, and this series is in the top five in all categories. The characterization is really great, and can certainly stand an extended story line. Congratulations on great work!

I really love this storyline. But how can someone go through this much when it comes to their friendship/ relationship and not fall in love. I would love for them to fall in love and have that powerful relationship but then they are cheating on their husbands

Please continue, love this story, can totally buy in to the characters the build up is frantastic

Definitely needs at least one more follow up if not more. Thanks.

Thanks for sharing!!

Please complete next seduction

I love this story and where it's going... The two of them falling in love with each other would be awesome! They seem too nice to go through hell and back to get there and I sense your writing is more romantic; it's best to stay with this as a love story... Eventually;)

Thank you for your wonderful writing for us to enjoy!

L

So well written with great character development. Although they refer to each other as "best friends," the intimacy, compatibility, and connection they share says they are in love with each other, even if they are yet to realize it. Perhaps that will be for a future chapter. I would love to read more and also for these two to realize they really do have feelings for each other. You are a talented writer. Thank you so much!

Best story I have read in a long time. I would love to see were these to go from here.

I agree; you're talented and this story definitely requires more. So please, please let your fingers dance along your keyboard. Waiting with bated breath.

I really appreciate all the feedback - thank y'all for taking the time to read it and comment. I've got some ideas about where this story goes for Laurel and Amy, but I've also seen some interesting ideas in this comment section...I guess we'll see where the creative juices take me. = )

Again - thank y'all so much!

-FUN

Thank you for writing such a beautiful erotic story. I hope that it will develop into a story of deep love, too. xx

In my opinion, a good writer shouldn't ask for the advices of the masses. You must know exactly, how long your stories should be or how they must end. If you do not know that, that's just a waste of time.

Great, I'm soaked and I'm at work. I love these two women. Wow!!

loved this story, and loved the changes that come to the relationship between the characters. Would love to see more of the pair (I'm secretly hoping for a more lovey dovey lets-get-rid-of-our-hubbies relationship to blossom 😍)

Absolutely loved this! Would so love to read more of their story. One of the best I've read in a long time.

These two are not just fun to read about, they're completely believable. Wherever you decide to go with them, I'm along for the ride! As I said, next chapter please!

They were so lovely like two teenagers in love, I can't believe they weren't in love with each other!!!

Loved the story, 5 stars. For me, the next logical step would be to involve the hubbies. At least that way, it would turn what could be considered cheating into sharing. After, of course, they have a bit more fun by themselves.

I'm hooked !! Amazing story line. I'm not sure what you want next, but I would love about 30 more chapters in this story. Extremely erotic. I can visualize what these women look like. I can see their passion on their faces when they are together. I can see their faces as they cum and watch their bodies respond to each other.

Amy's tit fucking Laurel's pussy was just too amazing for words.

Well done !! Please continue.

First of all. Absolutely awesome that you decided to continue the story. Thanks for that.

Second. What a story it is! No doubt about it. I love those 2 love birds.

I don't really have anything negative to comment about your writing. Maybe just reflections on how I would want this story to continue based on my own personal taste.

Laurel and Amy are both described to being happily married with their husbands and that they are really just best friends (with awsome benefits).

But their benefits are rapidly escalating, so one might wonder if maybe their feelings for each other is also escalating and how that will effect their relationship between them and how the husbands will fit in that picture.

MY personal opinion is for this story do go more towards the lesbian side of the spectrum. And have them steadily reaching a point to where they have really fallen in love with each other. And make them understand that they are no longer just best friends...but soulmates....*aww*...BUT FIRST, they have to bang, and bang hard. ;-)

Well...thanks for "listening"

You and these two Ladies have given us all two wonderfully steamy tales of exploration and experimentation that simply must carry on. Laurel being the “corrupting” influence of the pair should perhaps continue her role as guiding Amy into ever more intriguing situations. D/S denial maybe even a naughty public adventure with Laurel calling the shots. Let your imagination run wild and thrill us all.

DEFINITELY want more. Two thumbs up, for sure! Keep this going!

#1 - everyone needs a friend like Laurel!

#2 - as I mentioned in part 1, totally HOT!! The chemistry between them is unbelievable. Nice job!!

#3 - the ONLY part I skimmed over was the bit about sex between Amy and her husband. But that's because I'm a lesbian and that stuff does nothing for me. That said, I do understand why you put it in there. Still gave you 5 stars!

#4 - more with these two please!!

~ L

Please continue this story

Great writing, great story line, great sequel. Nothing more to be said. I rest my case.

Just when it was getting good too. So many avenues to explore. Should the husbands stay in the picture? Should the women eventually get together and live with each other and the kids? Can't wait to see where you take this.

Another Great Story!

Please do not stop this loving Story!

Thank you for some loving wet wet moments too mmmmm

Aunt Helena

54yo Lesbian Aunt from Portugal

Please continue the story. Really great!

I LOVED IT!!! I can't wait to see what happens between the two of them. Next chapter ASAP please and thank you. Great job.

Loved this, and the previous installment. Really hope you write more.

Love love love your writing! Love the characters!

Love the sex !

I couldn't stop reading! Please, please write a third. I would love to see what happens next. :)

Just went through and re-read all of your work! You are kind of a genius. I am dying to know what happens next in this story. These have been two of my favorite characters since the first installment. You got me hooked, so please, keep writing!

I love your writing the build up is incredible!

I have read all your stories & every single one has turned me on.

What a great story. The characters are fantastic, can't get enough of them. I really enjoy your writing. Would love to see many more episodes.

This story series is truly great writing I will read all your submissions and my favorite author (besides you now) is Lee Child, loved the Jack Reacher reference!

Loved it all, cant wait for more. Do the husbands get involved? Or a third younger innocent?

Great story, love the way it floats... Please write part 3 of it... Can't wait..

This story was well laid out and built beautifully. I love that the characters are a bit older and that you truly spent time showing how close they are. I had to go back and read part 1 as I had not seen it before.

Please continue the story! The layers of storytelling with flatout hotness are fantastic. It would be cool to overlay the continuation of their relationship with looks at Laurel's past to see how she became so confident. Keep up the good work!

- NefariousNikki

Please continue... Excellent writing and lovely story.

I think I am wetter than both . I need just a little more MMMMMMMMMMM

i love their "mentor-pupil" relationship and that they both have a clear "need" for it. Even as a man I'd prefer that they not involve the husbands more than mention of their marital sex improving. You can alway add them later.

One thing that was mentioned and not explores was Amy's fascination with Laurel's ass. Maybe part of L's back story is that she loves to be touched and licked there. Butt - I'd rather that you not turn it all anal or all 3 way because i like that it is about the L & A relationship and their growing intimacy.

Yes, I vote for the story to continue. Finding out more about Laura's past sounds very exciting. What of the two in regards to the future... This is also an interesting concept to be explored. Again, more please.

This was so erotic and juicy. Reminds me of my best friend and i. I would love some more stories of these two gals. You are a great writer loverofFUN.

More please.. Wonderful story.

Enjoying both the story & characterization. Please continue developing this series! x

Great story. Keep going.

...leaving me totally and completely intoxicated (and spent). I luv it! And I saw this story's continuation just after commenting about how much I wanted the story to continue. Mmmm, wonderful timing. (A little secret: there's a friend at work with whom I wish something like this story could happen. It won't but, it's a wonderful fantasy.)

I so look forward to any continuation of this story.

I want another part into the series as my love story is something like this

lately AMAZING!!! One of the stories and very well written I've read. Love it and keep up the great writing can't wait to read more :)

This is probably, by far, one of my favorites from this site! I couldn't stop reading! Can't wait to see what's in store for Amy and Laurel!

Simply an overall amazing read. Please continue, Laurel and Amy's story can't end here.

This is my first story of yours that I read. It was amazing. I cannot wait to see where you take these two. It was so hot, well written and had so much fun build and payoff. More please..

I t love this story and want more. Please continue the adventures of these two lovely women.

Every now and then I read a Story that hits a certain rating .........

This should be a 10 star rating , 5 stars are just too common nowadays . WE Need to CHANGE the Rating System .

On many levels I could see this story made into a series of videos . The degree of emotions portrayed by these women are real and reflect what really 2 people feel when there is a relationship developing . The fact that this was written to be more than a stroke off story reflects the skill of the author . Many Congrats !

It's great to read a sweet, romantic story that is so well written and with such good character development.

Thank you so much for another excellent piece of writing. I agree with others, that more of Laurel and Amy's story would be wonderful. Five stars.

More please...

WOW, OH, WOW.

This is a brilliant story, the relationship between the girl's is so real and moving, how Laurel has slowly brought Amy out of her repressed past to her present position is so well written is just excellent. You must, just must develop their tale, there is scope for many, many more episodes of this, please do not disappoint your readers, we want to know how their relationship develops. Only complaint is one can only give it 5*, this deserves at least a 10.

Thanks for continuing the fantastically beautiful story. Erotic, sexy, loving real character development of a special bond between "Best Friends". They have matured into a believable loving relationship. Looking forward to the next chapter where their "love" does not destroy their families.

I've read this story several times and each time it leaves me in awe. It's so good!

Well worth another, I'd love to read the next instalments.

Just wanted to say, that I agree with the rest: We want more! :)

Even thought you flipflopped the names a few times and some grammatical errors (I'm not a grammar Nazi) this is one of the best stories I've read on here for years. Your sex scenes had me hard and horny as hell. Please continue these characters. No drama. Keep them besties and their exhibitionist adventures like in the classroom at the conference. Great job.

I don't care what happens next, as long as there is more! This is one of the best stories I've read by far!

I can't believe you did that to us by ending it there!!! You definitely have me waiting for more!!

Please keep writing this story it's so good

Please please please write more, I love this pair and I think they still got so much to give us

Please finish this!!!! I need it

I apologize to everyone who has commented and messaged me about continuing this series. I do plan on writing another chapter - but sometimes RL (real life) gets crazy and hectic and hard and medical issues are never easy or planned for. I'll be back as soon as possible and plan to write as soon as I can. Thank y'all for understanding. xoxo

I enjoyed this series. I love the characters of Laurel and Amy and i think they truly love each other more than just friends. They just don't realize it yet...or maybe they do. Hmmm.

Please continue this series. Would love to read more about Amy and Laurel! I wish you well, and I hope you are healing & recovering. Be well.

Such a sexy story. Really made me wet and horny. Keep it up please ❤️💦🖕. God I need something now 😍

This and the Xmas story are absolutely my favorite two stories on this site. Such a sexy, fun, read.

More, please ! , and soon !

Your writing is just delicious. You've made me feel almost a part of the story. I need more and so hope you'll allow them to express that they are in love with each other.

Thank you for the FUN, and the pleasure !

I loved this story and the first one, the characters are amazing. I would love to see you write more stories about these two and their adventures. 5 stars easily!

Yes please more chapters these 2 are so hot together

Please write more!

These two ladies are incredible!! They should dump their husbands and spend 24-7 together in bed--with periodic showers together, of course!!! More, more, MORE!!!

Great stuff! Nice build up with good characters and wonderful chemistry. Please write more!

Fantastic story! So well written and unbelievably HOT!! Looking forward to more!

Definitely needs to be more!

This is a great story, very well written and I can't wait for a continuation.

Ok, that was probably the best erotic story I have ever read. I used to read and look at porn all the time (95% girl girl) but haven't much the past for years because either the writing just isn't good enough (so I used to write my own) and vids were almost never quite right (I would write and direct them quite differently but of course, my straight laced reputation would be stained if I left the corporate wonk job to be a porno guy lol). It is kind of a fluke I ran across your work. This is really, really well done. Highest compliments.