All Comments on 'A Fetish or Two'

You have the elements of a great story. Anticipation, the gyno exam, the surprise anal experience, the recollections of exams past. Would like to see a second part describing the actual exam and a third with what she does when she goes home, a fourth when her lover gets home, etc.

That about covers it.

love the anticipation and background info. can't wait for the next chapter!

Absolutely AMAZING what you accomplished in 750 words!!! It grabs the reader from it's first short paragraph, locks them into place and then tortures them in the most exquisite way possible for the remaining 725 words. Fans of medical exam erotica should LOVE this!!! I'm absolutely smitten!

Can often be far more erotic and intense that the actual event. Add that to her serious need to play doctor and I see very high doctors bills in her future. Very good story with a lot of inner emotional feelings being played out.

Loved it

MST

This story proves that even if its a kink you have no interest in great writing can make it hot and sexy. A lot of heat in very few words, great job.

This is exactly why I dislike stories that have no build-up, this is perfect and it's only build-up, the anticipation, the out of time foot-tapping knee-shaking anticipation.

I have passages of my own work that I refer to when I want a shortcut to the right mood to write more, this just joined them. It is liquid desire, potent and immediately intoxicating.

A little jarring when you flip from remembered memory back to the current time frame. Your style uses clinical terms, which may have been an intentional form given the setting.

Still, a very nice read.

I just read in your profile "Leaving a comment bumps you to the top of my reading list!" so I thought I'd leave a comment.

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There is a skill needed to craft a short piece, a precision that is required for it that is less called for in a full-length story. In a longer work you can meander and charm, develop and stew. The additional flavor added by such activities covers over a multitude of sins.

In short fiction there is no such forgiveness. Like a good joke or a scary story, it must be exact, clinical, complete and satisfying with no wasted motion. I respect the short-story and cherish it for these very qualities. This one has all of them.

This narrative spares little time in placing its chilly images into your mind, offers no apologies for the invasive brightness of its probing. Still, its a steady crawl, like icy fingers walking up your leg. It breeds discomfort, cultivates it in the peatry dish of the reader. It's not sexy, but it's arousing in the way that things that push you and prod you often are; you find pieces of yourself in the stirring, profane little aspects that whisper to you in your own voice about things you've never known. And you begin to like the sound.

I loved it. I relish that self-exploration. Thank you for probing me. I'd definitely come back for another visit.

On the one hand a little scarily erotic (scared me that I got turned on as the story-teller told of her arousal), and on the other hand it made me very very glad that I'm not a woman. I'll give my wife extra loving hugs next time she gets back from her obgyn.

Damn good story.

This is a perfectly written short story. It's like a nightmare and a fantasy all rolled into one! And I so appreciate that the doctor is a woman, it wouldn't have been the same if it were a man. Excellent.

You did a good job describing the birth of a fetish. Loved that about it. That being said, I would have wanted to read more, to see what would follow. I understand that sometimes a story just ends because you have gotten your point across, which you did marvelously. Just in my own personal wish I would have like to see more of what happened next. I have to rate a five though, since what is written here is of good quality, and it fully does eaxctly what it is supposed to do which is explain the beginnings of a fetish or two, possibly three if you re-read the story again.

Sincerely, PB

i am a believer