All Comments on 'A First For Everything'

Geesh, do you actually speak the way you write,,,you need to take a writing class of get some editing help.

Remarkable scene. So this is what happens when you move to the other side of the tracks? The unstable triangle of people always arousing however. Little polishing and you have an interesting engaging story. Good start.

So bad I didn't even finish the story and gave you a 1 Star - would like to have given you a 0, but not available. Your grammar is not only poor, it sounds like a fifth world nation wrote your try at a story.