by johnwhoknew
Very well done both with the story line and the writing. Really one of the best
Hope Chapter 3 will not take to long .. cant wait to read it ..
There better be a third chapter or I will hunt you down,lol Please don't leave us hanging here man.
You are killing me. This is as hot as the record heat we're having.
More. More. More. and soon.
I totally agree with johnwhoknew if he don't hunt ya I will..
Absolutely brilliant there is a whole lot of feelings in this guys head ...
Well done indeed! Amazing how this story brought back memories from my own teenage tears from many years ago. ahhhhhh the age of innocence and losing that innocence.
Can't wait for Chapter 3 -- and there just HAS to be one!
Great job .
Love your work.
This is an extraordinary story.
Hanging for the third installment.
At first I was skeptical a lot of first time stories hold little pull for me but a friend suggested I read this and I'm so glad I did not only is it well written (unlike my comment) it isn't just about the sex or the nerves or even the awkward after moment (well not yet) and I have to say this sounds so much like my first time then a lot of others though mine wasn't quite so planned out
Can't wait for chapter 3
What will be interesting is, since you drove your car over to her place to catch the Limo to the Prom, not knowing she had already moved her car to the Hotel, which you didn't notice it missing when you arrived at her parents house, how about the morning after when her brother wakes up, your Best Friend, as well as her parents and notices your car there and hers is gone and so is she? Where does that place you? I want to see you wiggle out of this mess! Other than that, besides being very windy, it is a fun story!
didnt he establish earlier that they lived near by? he could have walked there...
Again, I have to say, I love the way you've built up your characters and brought them along their journey towards that "first time." Moving on to chapter three now....
RecHiker
Absolutely enthralled by this story it seems so much as if it's an excerpt from my life!
First of all you are an exceptional writer, i feel like i am a part of the story. Continue writing because you obviously have a passion for it. Thank you for the amazing read!
Your writing style is awesome. The plot is laid out beautifully and with a perfect pace. I do have one worry, though. Jeanie must be completely raw after all that dry humping while wearing no underwear. Ouch!
I enjoyed the story, but there is one small problem, soccer and cross country are both fall sports so a person can not be on both teams,a small detail but details do matter.
This is a classic story and throughout it seemed so real. It takes me back to the 50's and Nancy. Gawd almighty, it was written so well and seems like a true story from my life. Great story and the words flowed perfectly over the pages. Keep up the great writing.
How could ANYONE dislike this story. I would say it is the best of the best in all my years. Please keep writing.