All Comments on 'A Game for Two'

It's difficult to read SOOOO many lines and paragraphs of words describing ... nothing ... before we can create some kind of mental image of what the fuck is going on. Without that scene set in the reader's mind within the first paragraph, they're just words.

Got about halfway through this and gave up. Too many words describing nothing of consequence.

So much potential, loved what you strived to do. The initial emotionally painful scene gave way to debauchery that could have been condensed without losing the message/the bitter sweetness. Keep sharing.

It was difficult to read. I became so lost in the words that I found it difficult to paint a picture in my mind from them. Was he forced to watch her destroy his self worth? Don't stop writing because your 1st attempt fell short.

"How could this be, and why am I here?", She asked herself.

Same!

Way too flowery. Made it hard to follow the story line. thanks

The point of this diatribe was never made.

Doesn't seem like a woman to be married to, even in fiction.

I have no idea what’s going on.

Nope

I didn't really gel with your style of writing, but this was an excellent submission and I look forward to reading more of your work.

Love? Gross, another sad cuck and his gangbang slut, hard to have any respect for her or any self respect for either of them. Gross the stories here just get worse has if the cuck writers have up their game

What an outpouring of nonsense. I skipped most of it.

You wore me out with all the description. I started scanning forward to find out what was happening, not sure what was going on, I just couldn’t take it any more.

Epilogue: One year later both of these complete idiots were dead from the STD the cheating skank slut received from these twelve men and had passed on to her sissy wimp cuck. Nobody gave a flying fuck. The world was a better place without them.

Pointless

Horribly written, made no sense.

Nah!

Can you, please, at some future time, post an explanation for those of us who are condemned to use English for communication? Thanks in advance...

Not going to waste time wading through is mess, and just find another lousy cuck story. So desperate to get your cuck shit posted that you put this mess in LW.

This story needs editing, the dialog is florid, artificial, nobody talks like that and nobody should write that way. The author used far too many $10 words, please dump the thesaurus.

Entirely too wordy

Gave it up after a third the way through. Was very difficult to read and at times the words may no sense.

As he watched, he trained the barrel of the HK-121 on the scene before him, squeezing the trigger, turning everyone, including the whore, into a crimson mist. Death to them all.

This writer trying to come across as a sophisticated writer falls flat as the story is just a jumble of incoherent words making visualization a very tedious endeavor.

tried way tooooo hard

Another femdom fetish-cuck fantasy like too many already here.

Strangest mess I’ve tried to read in a long while.

The fuck?

Got through the first two paragraphs and decided I didn’t want to waste my time

This is what huffing your own farts looks like in written form

This was a waste of my time. You definitely overthought this......might have been a good idea, but lousy execution.

Sorry felt like a story about a 13 pervert getting off on his dad’s Penthouse magazine. Hubby is clearly a weak and twisted cuck so you made wife a full blown whore and slut. This is what you need to get excited? Nonsense