by TheBigLove126
You lost me at “I want you to fuck me on Mom's unconscious body”. Without that it would have been a decent story!
First of all, thank you for the feedback.
If anyone has read my other stories (on this site or others), "bizarre" or "different" story elements (such as druggings, questionable cheating, rape (on other story sites) and so on) are a must for me. If the story was just "daughter feels sorry for dad and gives her body to him" it never would have been written since that just sounds so boring (to me). I'm sure other authors would agree, if you wouldn't read it then you wouldn't write it.
And on a side note, I'm not upset with the comment at...it's constructive in a way and I respect that. If you had said "That was stupid, you can't write. What the hell is this shit!?" than I would feel different. I read and respond to every comment and email that I possibly can. It was not a story for you and that is perfectly fine
I thought it was well written and very hot. Maybe the sequel can have the Mom realizing her bad ways and wants to join in the fun.
Here's some advice. When you do a sentence like this:
"I'm sorry if this weekend hasn't been the greatest." She told Robyn.
It should read:
"I'm sorry if this weekend hasn't been the greatest," she told Robyn.
Comma, colon and then small letter ......greatest," she.........
And for all you assholes who hate critical comments.... fuck you. This is meant to help the writer improve.
Thanks for the advice, I will put that towards future writings
but what about the next morning, when she recalls this hot dream she thinks she had...
well done indeed....my oldest daughter and i have been an item since she was 19 been going on 12 yrs now...she's the love of my life we read these together before making love..she loves me cumming in her sweet holes.
He should have divorced the bitch and moved somewhere else with the daughter.